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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
You bring me an enchantment, more day by day. A mystery you are to me. You give me the many fragments of a puzzle and pray that it is not solved. Every day it gets harder to contain all of these feelings that I have for you. I look at you and I see a mask. The lone defence of your heart in disaray. I am here for you. Don't speak, your eyes are the window into your soul. Touch me now. Let me hear the words you are afraid to say. Show the faith you have in yourself. Show the faith you have in me. Unlock your heart and let me in. Only then can love begin. Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jason~~~Are you in love???Awwwww...Your in love arent you...LOL This is really good...I give it 2 thumbs up...Keep up the good work!!!  ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Thanks Erin, I didn't know that it was at all possible to blush while sitting alone at my computer. Well put. jason  |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Hey, Jac's back! Or have ya been here a while and I've been out of touch lately? Anyway, awesome poem dude. (my first attempt at typing 'dude' came out 'fufe'. crazy.) Ok, I'm outta here. Great job, as usual! *~Meredith~* Somebody stop the world, I want to get off! *me |
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Misty Blue Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 44 |
I really feel poems about love in reality. Cause everyone should know it's not just hugs and kisses. You have to have patience cause I'm not an open person which really interrupts many relationships.Thanks and Stay Tru |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Great to see you back Jacman! I really enjoyed these wonderful sentiments ... very nice ending lines, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Meredith, Its great to be back. Your not the only one out of touch lately. Thanks for the reply fufe. Misty, I'm glad that my work was able to reach someone who understands what it really means. I used to have a problem being open about things, but over time I've learned that surfacing things to myself helps to talk to other people about them. Thanks! Kit, well its nice to be back. I've got alot of new stuff I can't wait to share. Thanks alot guys for replying I really appreciate it. Jason Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow, how sweet is this?! it's beautiful....she's a lucky gal to have a guy with these wonderful thoughs and words all combined! good luck... Salma |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"Unlock your heart and let me in. Only then can love begin." Wow... what a return piece! I hope to see more soon! Welcome back! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Salma, well I sure hope that she agrees with you. It's alot easier to write about feelings than to act apon them. Wish me luck!! Thanks. Luv bug, Glad you liked it. It's great to be back; thanks!!! Thank you two, you made my day today. Jason Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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