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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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If blame is the name of the game, You're the winner and I'm the same. Standing, pointing a finger at me, What's so evil in me that you see? It's your fault that we're now no more, Bury the hatchet, and open up your door, Childish actions caused your dismay, You never thought it would be the day, When you realize your wrong in confusion, Our lost lives are past in a state of cruel illusion, Let's start a fresh beginning with more trust, No ignorant storms shall let our friendship rust, This world of give and hate makes us insecure, Selfish and mindless acts controls you to do more, Two-faced, take off that mask you hide behind, I'm me, your not what you use to be inside, You're a false character, never was trustworthy, No pride, Is that what you want your name to be? Choke on the words you speak, I have no time, Clutters of words, cloud up in my innocent mind, You build up walls of anger, always on debate, Soon you'll be up in smoke in your senseless hate, "I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering, I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection." ~DMX~ "Prayer III" |
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ShUgArHiGh Junior Member
since 2000-08-24
Posts 24 |
Overall i thought that poem was great. It was intense in the way u expressed things. I liked it! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
jeremy~~~this poem reminds me of my so called sister (who i prefer not to call her a sister)...i really like it...keep up the good work!!! ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
I really enjoying all your poems and I especially loves this one.Keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Jeremy, I like this a lot~ It's really very real and espically to me. NOt much more to say except great poem! Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Heey babe...nice to see ya back here! Missed ya lots! Great post, very powerful last two lines by the way....it's all quite powerful to tell u the truth.... Salma |
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*ChrisLover* Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 46erie, colo |
jeremy..... great poem!! its so true about my life!! wow i can so relate to this!! and i hope the besst for u in the future!! trut me you'll find the one your meant to be with!!! you should e mail me so we can talk rather than just in here!! k?? you seem like a sweet guy!! ill talkto you later.... love always, janette p.s. hang in there sweet heart!! Everything happens for a reason.. sometimes it's bad, but sometime it's good!! just remeber there's people out here who care! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Do you know me or something? You and my ex should have a party, cause I think that may be what he's feeling, if he put it directly into words. Great poem, and I totally understand what you are saying. Jenn |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
This is excellent! I really, really enjoyed it. You're awesome. *~Meredith~* Somebody stop the world, I want to get off! *me |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
one word : WOW! you are amazing! I absolutely loved it! And to say that I can relate is an understatement! This is the story of my life LoL. Anyways before I get started on that all...you're great! I hope everything works out for the best! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~Why is it that love always starts with a HuG grows with a kIsS and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey there babe~* You know that I love every piece of your work. This was so powerful and amazing. Just like you  Keep up the great work!!~!*DQ*!~< !signature--> "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 08-26-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is really great Your emotion was strong in this one, very well done. Keep up the awesome poetry.When you realize your wrong in confusion, Our lost lives are past in a state of cruel illusion, |
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