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Trembling Lamplight
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Trembling Lamplight |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
** haven't visited here for a while, ello everyone  . my first vain attempt of rhyming..here goes..Gloomy street, wet with tears Cars charge past, owners blind to genuinely slow Human fears. Pools of trembling lamplight Illuminates lethargic pedestrians Cast tentative, glowing insight Through dense, machine-infested, twisted Polluted night air. Gloomy street, wet with tears, People avert eyes from others, Afraid to reveal...inwardly shudders Fear for their personal safety. Sun makes her appearance Light struggles through the smog Fingers bleed, cut by factories wrathful transmittance Sun snatches back her hand, Squints accusingly at the shrouding fog. Gloomy street, wet with tears Wrinkles etch deep into humanity Blind to the indifference of our blazing Sun Oblivious to screams of dying nature Only can peer through Trembling lamplight. "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
This wasn't vain at all!! it was really good. keep up the great work! ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
this is really good...i think you should try rhyming more often...looks good to me!!! ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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