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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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It's like 4:30 am. I cant sleep. Im bored so I wrote a poem. Sleepless nights Shortened dreams Interupted by silent screams Darkened room Mindless thought Obnoxious noises are fought Eyes of closure Smell of air Wake up, I shouldn't dare Now I hope Wish I weep This poem will put me to sleep I want feedback but remember its 4:30 am. Take it into consideration. Love, ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
SURE!!!!! JUST MAKE EXCUSES!!!! Just kiddin' with ya man... This is the type of poem I dare not write...well, I tried once...but it didn't turn out too well...maybe I'll post it sometime. You nailed the essence man..fine nocturnal work...oh, it's 3:30 were I'm at and I just posted something too...check it out. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I like this. It's cool. Kind of like some of the poems i've written before. (only not at 4:30 in the morning. |
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Lurdburger Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 39Carlisle, Cumbria, England |
Hey hey, there's a lot to be said for nocturnal writing. This is good, nice short kinda snapshot idea. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Ah, I hate not being able to sleep. Maybe it happend so you could write this great poem! Nice work  |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
you know what i hate the most about not being able to fall asleep???that i lay in my bed for hours starring at the clock...this was a good idea for a poem...hey you may not have been able to sleep but something really good came out of it!!! can you guess what that is??? your poem!!! ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey babe! LOL Don't I know about those late-nite-spur-of-the-moment poems  Maybe i should start posting mine. This was awesome as usual. Keep up the great work!!~*~*THIS IS MY 100TH POST! LOL IM EXCITED..JUST THOUGHT ID SHARE*~*~ ~!*DQ*!~< !signature--> "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 08-17-2000).] |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"sleepless nights shortened dreams interupted by silent screams" That is sooooo well placed...One of the best lines I've read in passions. Keep writing As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Haven't been in in a while and kinda stumbled onto this. I believe you have an exceptional talent, as most in here do. The insomnial distress conceived a beautiful piece of literature here. So be it belated or not, allow me to welcome you into our circle, hope to see a lot more of your work. Thomas |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
hehe gosh...am i late or what?! but very nicely write my friend....unique rhyme you gave this...keep writing jeremy, you're awesome! salooma ps unfortunatly i missed this when it popped up, I was in bed already...all nice, comfy, and warm....ahh! |
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