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He Follows Me
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He Follows Me |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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He Follows Me vehicles slammed in lines of caffeine addiction he is a being of unstable nature behind wheels of torture thought out plans blue prints of the hunt I just happened to be there the one in front of his taste behind buildings of sugar and beans hidden from the mulch of the road from the speeding thoughts that sickness in his smile the many times of this game he plays, he treads in waters deep and sets fires for himself I fled that steamy afternoon away and found him there around every corner I turned behind every sign in the city he was there, with that smile that deep rooted illness his plans unfinished and me on his list, running scared from his ways from his bleeding eyes and unstable mind,... his silvery gray vehicle my nightmare screams, he follows me it seems. *Based on a true story*  . |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Such a frightening experience, to be stalked. And just as unfortunate that the laws are so weak to prevent it. Maybe he needs medical help...like a little tincture of 9mm placed smartly between those "bleeding eyes" of his. (Not that I would ever advocate violence mind you). Nice expression of the anguish here. Let me know if I can help. Hardrock |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Extremely well done SF...greatly enjoyed the read... jwesley |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Weird! Creepy! I loved the strange images..... as if from a dream. Great work! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
I love the touch of reality you add in it. Good luck Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
well spitfire, we have always known that we were alot alike. i escaped my stalker in april when i arrived where i am at. i pray for you. and don't forget to look over your shoulder, only YOU truly has your back. i love you. uh btw, i loved your poem!! you are a queen of imagery!!! hee hee kynder Sunshine can not bleach The snow, Nor time unmake what Poets know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Magebeast Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60 |
Wow SpitFire...it flowed in a different sort of way, but I really loved the poetry. It's too bad that people get obsessed like that though... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SF, It is truly sad that there are people in the world like this. They are sick and need help. I hope you never see him again my friend. Take care. Powerful writing you. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Spitfire I was looking over my shoulder as I read each line of the poem, intense stuff. I hope the stalker is no more. take care, great poem. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Another intense story. Very scary. Great words. Take care |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Oh no! How horrid! Have you got rid of him yet? I was once besieged for weeks by a pupil of mine who turned out to be a psychopath! There is also another quite unpleasant person who has been following me around town for years, but in contrast to yours he seems to be harmless ... Good luck? Oh, excellent poem (I was so carried away I almost forgot about the most important bit!)  Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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