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This Moment of Pain
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This Moment of Pain |
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Trisha4_u Junior Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 28 |
This Moment of Pain Sometimes this silence is insane... feeling so lost in this moment of pain. Wondering if I will ever hear his voice again. Will my love reach him in that shell he hides in. Understanding all the reasons why he hides away, protecting his very exsistance from the pain. Do I sit beside the shell, gently knocking once in a while hoping he will let me in, or do I walk away loving him just the same? The tears won't stop running no matter what i do. Maybe he doesn't understand, I too feel the pain! This silence is like thunder and lightening crashing around me. The anger of his emotions i feel running through out my soul. Each strike bringing on a wave of over whelming sorrow, tearing away at me.... does he see, I too feel the pain. I feel my love adrift, lost in a world where only he holds the key. Does he see me holding out my hand to him, calling his name? Wondering, does he feel my tears as I feel his ... in this moment of pain? Trisha4u 6-15-2000 2:10pm pst. [This message has been edited by Trisha4_u (edited 06-16-2000).] |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Don't we all have "shells"? Sometimes it is harder to get out than in.... Nicely written. Thanks. Click |
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Trisha4_u Junior Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 28 |
Thank you Click, this poem started out as a letter written for someone dear to me who lost a child recently. This is only my second attempt at expressing my thoughts in this fashion, I am truely a newbee. I appreciate your kind words.  Trisha4u |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
What a poewerful piece of writing! You express so well that feeling we have when we want to help someone, or at least show them we care, but we don't know how to get through to them. Very well done! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
As I was reading through this great poem of yours, it reminded me of my mother-in-law, whose husband was involved in a horrible accident, where a young man was accidently killed. He's not the same person. I believe she feels just this way. Do you mind if I share this with her? This really moved me. Thank you for sharing. |
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Trisha4_u Junior Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 28 |
taramw, yes you are welcome to share it. lotharingia, thank you. I just hope he opens that door. I have been were he sits and if it had not been for a sister..well thanks god she held out her hand to me. Trisha4u |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
in answer yes kid you wait and knock every once in a while, or just sit and be there, like the three friends of job, they didn't say a thing but just offered support by being there, in the end all was put right. Know that we are all here for you also, you can vent or cry here and we will support you. with all that we can. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
This reinds me of lotsa people i know.....including myself. They won't let you in,but they still expect you to wait until they come out.....grr....mamma always told me,never marry an introvert or a pervert. HAHA lol.....i love my mom. heehee,do i always get off the subject or what?? anyhow i think you did a great job expressing this kind of.......confusion. very good poem =] swamp And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
theres a great behind this poem. and i'm becoming a fan so please keep writing so i can keep reading. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Trisha, your words are very touching. I know the feeling of someone holding back, not letting you close. And I think that they don't know we hurt too, becaause they are too far behind the door. |
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