Dark Poetry #2 |
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Past Perfect |
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catalinamoon![]()
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone ![]() |
Sometimes I'm sad for all the past I'll never see again. It's not so good, the present tense. It's better where I've been. The future is so dimly lit, it's hard to plan ahead. My hopes and dreams so in the air, it's possible they're dead. I know I have to persevere, no other choice to make. But if I really had my way, I'd argue back with fate. I'd ask a chance to try again, to do it right this time. To go back to the day I left, the past to re-align. But no, such things do not occur, I'm stuck with what I've done. No matter all the tears I cry, my future has begun. Can't take it back no matter how I wish with all my might. I'm on the road, though looking back, no answer is in sight. Perhaps some good will come of it, this retrospective haze. But nothing ever cures my need to live those better days. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Where do I vote? This is one of your best, Cat. It was as near perfect as you could get. Loved every line. Hardrock |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
cat-This was beautiful, if we could only go back and do it again, right this time, but nothing can ever be any other way than the way it is. Good write. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Oh wow, cat. What a sad one. You must try to look to the future. You can't undo the past, but you can learn from your mistakes. BTW, my mother has been going through a bad patch similar to yours (from what I can see), and she says that a certain book really helps. It's called: "The Seven Spiritual Laws of Success" by Deepak Chopra. It teaches you not to look back with remorse and to make the most of the moment. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
Oh! You are so very right! "But nothing ever cures my need to live those better days." NOTHING CAN EVER CURE THAT NEED! Nothing! A lovely poem Deepak |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
First let me say I loved this, and now read my "wishing well" and you will know what I hope for you!!! Superb poem!!! |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
Excellent poem! You've put in words exactly how I've been feeling lately. Allan ![]() |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Aaww Cat,...you are here, and you are special, and you are important...so make from right now on as awesome as possible. That past thingy? well,..it makes us who we are. Ok,...quit laughing....I know it sounds like I'm trying to be all philosophical,...but I'm being honest and serious. ![]() [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 07-12-2000).] |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
i have to agree with rock on this one, moonbeam. this is by far one of your best. you have really touched a nerve in me. thank you for sharing. i take those tentative halfway regretful steps as well. no choice but to trudge on. excellent work, cat. keep it up. kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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