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They Turn You On Again
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They Turn You On Again |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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They Turn You On Again Seeing you through blue tinted shades, reminds me of those days. Of the heat and the lack of air in that place. The lack of understanding blowing around. Hatred plates for supper and tainted tears for tea. Reminds me of your blistered hands, the anger that they swell with and the pain. The smell of your cigarette smoke and the oil on your skin. Sea blown air and tea cups chipped in kitchens the size of a john. Collages of chairs and tupperware scattered. An art form this place. This expression in it's rawness,... your hatred splattered. Hazed and closing and returning to the way. These shades they turn you on again. They make us there again and they make you the same. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Wow. Hatred plates for supper and tainted tears for tea. Now that paints a vivid portrait in the mind! Awesome usage of the monster metaphor! Christopher |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Oh my sweet, sweet SpitFire...how can you possibly get any better than this? I saw every image...looked through those blue tint shades...and saw only the beauty of your words. What a terrific poem....Hardrock |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Wow! Hmm... I'm trying to think of the exact right words to express my thoughts on this one SpitFire... I guess, excellent!!!  |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is brilliant. So vivid! Each line is one to savour (in spite of the bitter taste). BTW, I dreamt about you last night! Or rather I dreamt I was reading your lilac words in comic! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Hey kid, a very vivid picture here, I'm just dropping in for a quick view. And you caught my eye. haha and my heart. love ya. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Awesome, as usual. Very strong picture. Hatred for dinner,thats my usual fare.. Love your work, all of it. Cat.. "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Previous posts speak it all, but I had to comment on exceptional work done here by you!!! Thanks for sharing Nostalgia is like a grammar lesson...You find the present tense..and the past perfect "Anonymous" |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
This poems absouloutly GLOWS! Wow! I am infinitly impressed. (Whatever that means) Great imagery!"your hatred splattered" Wonderful! -Wren |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SF, Sometimes we just have to accept that which we cannot change and move on. You have such a way with describing scenes that I feel like I am there beside you. This was very dark, but so beautiful. Excellent writing my friend.  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Seeing you through blue tinted shades, reminds me of those days. Of the heat and the lack of air in that place. The lack of understanding blowing around. Hatred plates for supper and tainted tears for tea. Reminds me of your blistered hands, the anger that they swell with and the pain. ------------------ hey you...  SF..this is awesome writing...powerful excellent imagery and use of metaphor your wrote these memories so that they are haunting and vivid... very strong work... take care jm I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Excellent poem! I love it when you title your poems! Get some rest you! Have fun! |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a very good poem and i know you can always get better and always are. so do keep it up. SpitFire I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
im sorry Spitfire that i didnt really get this poem..whats with those shades and the two characters in the poem, may i ask?hmmm... but anyway, i still enjoyed this read..."Hatred plates for supper and tainted tears for tea" really jumped right out at me, attracting my attention like the vivid descriptive phrases here too |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I am blown away totally. Such a powerful poem and my favourite out all the great poems I have read that flowed from your man. Man this needs further reading. Very dark and intense. I will get back to you on this poem later. Until then take care and peace "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
I hate to say who this reminds me of. You do so well at capturing the lesser side of human kindness. People have seen me say it before, and I will say it again: "the poem is not the poet." But I find myself sincerely hoping you have not had to live through this. |
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