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insect
Senior Member

since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

0 posted 2000-07-09 04:38 PM

JUDGMENT

No seconds ticking
Matter is missing
I'm awake in a place
Darkness of grace

Thoughts transform
Opposite to the norm
Direction to where
Mind moving to there

It's not a dream
So it would seem
Where does this go
I really don't know

A light is calling
At the end of the tunnel
Feels like falling
A vacuum funnel

Drawn with fear
Destination unclear
But starting to feel
My life a movie reel

The light expands
Into two large hands
Then a voice in my mind
The most wonderful kind

My cry of repent
For this is JUDGMENT

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-07-09 05:52 PM

~"A light is calling
  At the end of the tunnel
  Feels like falling
  A vacuum funnel."

~I've had one too many dreams like that to not have felt chills while
reading this. OooEee!!! Well written Insect. You dark little buggy you.
*Peace.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2000-07-09 07:49 PM

Yes, very chilling..Great expression.

Hardrock
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

3 posted 2000-07-09 08:43 PM

I see by your poem, Insect, that you too have traveled the dark tunnel. Interesting, isn't it? I really liked the structure and style of your poem. Hardrock

lotharingia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

4 posted 2000-07-10 03:28 AM

This poem has an almost hallucinogenic quality. I had to read it out loud to appreciate it fully. Very good indeed!

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland

Parker
Member Elite

since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

5 posted 2000-07-23 05:30 PM

insect, great interpretation of the final Judgement. I liked it very much.

Parker

Deborah1
Senior Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 653
New Hampshire

6 posted 2000-07-23 05:57 PM

Depicts a clear image of judgement day..Very well written!! Very interesting piece!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

insect
Senior Member

since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

7 posted 2000-07-24 10:50 PM

Thanks to all for responding

SpitFire…I love scary dreams!

catalinamoon…Chills are at there best when
                          they travel down the back of
                          your neck! Thank you

Hardrock…Thanks Hardrock! But the subway tunnel is the
                   only thing that comes close enough to that
                   description for me. Have you experienced
                   something similar to this poem? Love to hear
                   it in a poem.

lotharingia…Thank you very much!
                      Sometimes I read poems
                      out loud too!

Haleyja…Thank you!
                 I wonder if it is a final judgment?
                 Let's say you get sent from there to
                 the other place!!! Would you get
                 judged in his place? Maybe he don't
                 want you either!!

Deborah1…Thanks a lot!
                    I'm glad you found it interesting!

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