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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
in her echoing catacomb greedy walls are sucking out her soul again and her memories are melting Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Hmm... sad... left alone - a broken heart ... and after awhile, where do all the memories go? Are they too to be scattered? Sucked out? Very thought provoking Uta  |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
It's crazy how time can rape your memories...new views arising... don't worry it'll come back to you... Very good work here lotharingia D.E. < !signature--> Listen to your heart for it knows the way even when you don't. ~*Angel of Darkness*~ "So what are we, helpless? Puppets? No, the big moments are gonna come...you can't help that. It's what you do afterwards that counts. That's when you find out who you really are. You'll see what I mean..." -Whistler *+Daughter of Darkness+* [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 06-14-2000).] |
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gothicmoth Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 89 |
I got the impression of an elderly woman, but then I've been thinking of my grandmother a lot lately. This is hauntingly beautiful. |
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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
I am seeing a circular paradox here... this is interesting. I took "echoing / catacomb" to be memories, like a reverberating maze of them, but *within* that, "greedy walls / are sucking out / her soul again" and *because* of that "her memories / are melting". I'm probably way off here but this is very interesting to me, this puzzle you have presented. Fascinating. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Hi, all of you! and thanks for reading my poem! Tara and Dark Enchantress, I'm happy it meant something to you, that's the point of poems, after all. They are always what they mean to the reader. Gothicmoth, I hope your granny's OK, mine was rather confused towards then end of her life. I liked the old woman idea and I'm glad you liked the poem! As to what I was thinking of when I wrote it: It was meant to have a double significance. I was thinking of someone who has gone "insane" (a favourite subject of mine). The echoing catacomb being her house or her life, which is oppressing her, sucking the life from her, and as a result of this fear, she is forgetting everything else. Then, the other layer was meant to be, as Portia said (hey, you're quite good at sussing out my poems J), her mind itself: being the scene of her madness, her "self" is being eaten up by her mania, destroying all memories of what she was. Am I gibbering? I guess it must've been a bit cryptic. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
short and gripping... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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gothicmoth Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 89 |
My grandmother passed on several years ago and she too was very confused. We're not sure if she had alzheimers or what, but she got to where she would remember things in her childhood better than things that happened the day before. She had other health problems as well. Like Portia, I too saw a cycle here because insanity comes and goes in it's earlier stages. I definately got the idea of madness though in some form here, although I had difficulty putting that to words the first time. |
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gothicmoth Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 89 |
ack see now I've done it. I also wanted to say that the title, "theft," made me think there was no choice in the matter or control over it. Which is often how madness works. |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Very cool!!! Click |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
click, avanti, thanks! gothicmoth, I'm sorry to hear about your grandmother. Mine was like that too in the end, she thought everyone was the same person sometimes, or that each person was two or more people, or that everyone was some character from the past (her mother, her brother, both long since dead). She even thought my cat Widiot was her deceased husband. Throughout her life she was always doing things, and when she then got too old and weak, I guess she couldn't handle the feeling of uselessness that befell her (she wasn't interested in reading or other passive activities). I'm pretty scared about that happening to me when I'm old (or young, for that matter). Oh, and you're right about the title. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I've had the wall like this suck me dry, Hell I even went mad once and never recovered. My grandmother died a few years ago, God I miss her. Sweet memories. Thanks kid. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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