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ZuMBLe Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 33 |
This is not the most well thought out poem. But I'm in one of those moods and I thought I would put it in to words.. I think those are the best kind of poems. The ones that just spill from the heart. If you like it.. Great.. If not.. well, it was written for me.. Not really anyone else.. =P --------------------- Forever After Forever has come and gone Today is after And I am empty Words you whispered Lasted but a time Forever never ends Until after begins You said you would love me Forever [This message has been edited by ZuMBLe (edited 07-08-2000).] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
ZuMBle,well i like this...this is short and simple yet speaks volumes of your anguish...well done..  im just confused about these two lines: Forever never ends Until after begins how is forever never ending when it has "come and gone" in the first place?pls entertain this froggie here |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
I like this very much, and I don't know why you think it's not well thought-out?! It applies to all who suffer lost love. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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ZuMBLe Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 33 |
Forever is not supposed to end.. but often we say things will last "forever".. Like love. But they end. And that is after. Forever had come and gone. It made sense to me when I was writing it.. Does it make sense? Zum |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Makes sense to me,...and I like it. Good work getting it out of you. Take care. *Peace. |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
This made perfect sense to me, whats more important is you wrote it, a true expression, and great job!!!!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I like it a lot and made too much sense..Reminds me of a favorite song that includes this line."Does she know you said you'd hold me till you died-But your still alive." |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Thanx ZuMBle for your explanation..now i think i have a better understanding of this piece |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Oh, how sad! I know exactly how you feel! Great poem! Loved it! |
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