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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA 
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A drip at a time To this I decline Twines of souls Snuggling in these dreadful bowls, Stare for a moment Bare to stand witness End is nearer As this poet grows fearer. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Again, this is very good! I love your work! |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
your idea is profound here i really like this one so i had to vote. keep it up my friend. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Lonelypoet Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 123Conklin,NY,USA |
Xeonox, Great poem, I liked how it was worded. Dreams are the the gateways to making the impossible possible |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Well done all the way to the end. I could be wrong, but don't believe there's such a word as "fearer". Maybe change your last two lines just a little...I dunno, something like 'end is near this poet knows (feels, etc.) fear.' or even a different choice of rhyming words. just a thought...enjoyed this. jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 07-06-2000).] |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Your advice is well taken jwesley.  |
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