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catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2000-07-05 08:46 AM

Written a few years ago, about a past event that left a big mark..

Soul Mate Interruptus

He was looking for love.
So was I, forever it seemed.
I was stunned
when I first met him.
The man I had dreamt of
in the flesh.
We were casual
at first.
Had coffee,
went to the beach.
It was night,
the moon was full.
We drew symbols in the sand.
I knew he was like me.
We went to his loft,
still casual.
He showed me his etchings
(no lie)
and his crystal garden.
I was falling fast.
We drank wine,
trying to be casual
He looked at me then
And simply said "will you stay"?
And I said "yes".
(was there any doubt?)
No longer casual,
he pulled me into his arms
where I stayed
all night.
We made love
in front of the picture window,
and what a picture
it was.
I knew then
as the sun came up,
he was my destiny.
He wanted to be together
forever.
(I'm sure I heard that)
For two weeks we loved
with a passion
I had never known.
An intensity
that scalded my soul
And then he was
gone....

Deborah1
Senior Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 653
New Hampshire

1 posted 2000-07-05 08:50 AM

You have a way of drawing that picture, I can see the loft..two people lost in their togetherness...I building you a time machine right now!!! Excellent my friend

Hardrock
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

2 posted 2000-07-05 08:57 AM

Wow!!! Catalina....you really nailed this one. Such imagery and energy...I'm breathless. Talk about a hormone check!! I'll be reading this one again...and again. Hardrock

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

3 posted 2000-07-05 03:23 PM

wow this is really good. i enjoyed it alot. and do hope you keep it up. i want to have this same kind of thing happen to be but for it to last. so sorry your days like that did not.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

ChibiDeathscythe
Member

since 2000-06-09

Posts 128

4 posted 2000-07-05 03:27 PM

I like the almost abrupt ending, shows how quickly things disappear....

lotharingia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

5 posted 2000-07-05 03:33 PM

Wow. What a story. Sad but also romantic in a way. What do you mean by he was gone? Really or just for you, i.e. did he disappear or was it just the end of the relationship?

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

6 posted 2000-07-05 03:35 PM

~You swept me up to the sky with this, and then dropped me from 50,000 feet up. Ugh!!! He was gone??? Wow,...took me for quite a ride. Good one. *Peace.

[This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 07-05-2000).]

Rex
Member

since 2000-06-29

Posts 482
Houston, Texas

7 posted 2000-07-05 03:43 PM

Good one!! Particularly liked "scalding my soul". Keep coming on.

Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility.

[i]William Wordsworth[

Wren
Member

since 2000-07-05

Posts 312

8 posted 2000-07-05 06:51 PM

What an aestetic experience! Painful and beautiful at the same time.....

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