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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
"Who's there?" Disintegrating into the shore And the wind is never seen anymore Waves tell you it's coming Branches sing by humming Tubes start by haunting And mimic a wolfs howling Slamming shutters peak your attention But the sounds of voices you won't mention The wind knows you're alone Slipping through doors by a moan You are aware "Who's there?" You ask the question in fear An answer you don't want to hear Convinced it's the wind But still your heart races within You start to talk to yourself While returning the book to the shelf "Did I lock the door?" Overwhelmed of being unsure You try to leave the room Suction traps you like a tomb But you remember the windows are closed Now your breath is froze You shake the door to death "LET ME OUT OF HERE!!"with one breath Suddenly the lights go out And a stale smell about You jump on the bed and lay stiff A strange feeling you're starting to lift The door opens and your heart begins to race Shocked as you recognize your own face |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
"Who's there?" is a take off of a poem I did in OPEN#7 Called…The Grim-Reaper ________________________________ The Grim-Reaper The Grim-Reaper walks these halls Luring quitters with his calls Unsuspecting arrivals with no choice Smell the staleness of his voice His castle becomes your home Unaware that you're there to roam Walking in limbo you catch a whiff Enter a room to see yourself lying-in stiff _________________________________ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Knock,knock. hehe. Oooh,... (chills), this is a haunting piece from you Insect. I love it!!! *But the sounds of voices you won't mention. Now c'mon, I told you all about that girl that talks to me .haha...I did. ~Eeekkk,...ok, the more I read this...the more I am beginning to realize that IF I sleep tonight I will have nightmares. hehe Thank you. Oh, glad you checked in here. So glad to read you....really. Your poems kick major poet butt. *Peace. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Who's afraid of the dark? Not me as I touch the candle to the spark. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Scary stuff, makes me question, if you are good and go to heaven do you see the grim reaper?? Or is he only for the bad?? Interesting work though had be on the edge of my seat!!  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i enjoyed this a great deal. i tend to like the more deadly spookey stuff. love your work and i'll keep reading what you write. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- ideas flow through my mind and ink through my viens. so i |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
"Thanks for coming on such short notice " "And you're free to roam through my castle" SpitFire~Ok, but where's the can? Prometheus~I can't see a thing anyone got a match? Isis~You got any bigger chairs to sit on? Jeremiah~I like this place, I feel right at home! SpitFire~Did you just hear something?? Prometheus~Hey how did the candles light all at once?? Isis~Where did this chair come from and why the head and arm straps?? Jeremiah~Let's check out those rooms at the end of this corridor! SpitFire~Alright who's making the little girl voices??? Prometheus~Not me! Isis~Not me! Jeremiah~Me either!! SpitFire~WHAT??? Let's get OUT OF HERE!!! Prometheus~DOWN THROUGH THERE EVERYONE!!! Isis~RUN!!! Jeremiah~I’M RIGHT BEHIND YA!!! SpitFire~OVER THERE IN THAT ROOM!!! Prometheus~WHAT'S THAT STALE SMELL?!! Isis~IT'S GETTING COLD, HURRY UP!!! Jeremiah~WAIT FOR ME, DON'T CLOSE THE DOOR!!! "YES THANKS FOR COMING IN, MAKE YOURSELFS AT HOME YOUR GOING TO BE HERE A LONG TIME!!HA! HA! HA!" |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
the reason I don't go into dark is because you people are strange..... and give me the willy's Parker |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
I love this! It's so gothic. Really scary stuff. I'm a great fan of dopplegänger, reflections and similar. I hope there are more where that one came from! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Spooky...very spooky. And the poem is too. Nice goth....Hardrock |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Haleyja~Hellow is anybody there? lotharingia~Where is everybody? Hardrock~Let's close the door I'm getting chills down my neck! Haleyja~This place must be thousands of years old! lotharingia~Come on let's find the rest of the gang! Hardrock~Wich way? Haleyja~Look there's a candle burning down the end of this corridor! lotharingia~You go first Hardrock and Haleyja can follow us! Hardrock~NO WAY! You go first! Haleyja~I'll go first! lotharingia~I'm second Hardrock!! Hardrock~Well!!….ummm!…..Ok but I'm ready to run! Haleyja~I hear something! lotharingia~That's SpitFire's voice and Isis! Hardrock~And Jeremiah and Prometheus, they must be in there? Haleyja~I don't know about this I'm getting the willy's lotharingia~I can hear them perfectly now let's scare them! Hardrock~What's that stale smell? Haleyja~I can see my breathe? lotharingia~Ok we'll burst in on the count of three!!…THREE!!! he!he! Hardrock~BOO!! Haleyja~BOO!! lotharingia~HEY? I JUST HEARD THEM WHERE ARE THEY??? Hardrock~THE DOOR JUST LOCKED BEHIND US??? Haleyja~Did you hear that hey WHO'S THERE??? "YES THANKS FOR COMING IN, MAKE YOURSELFS AT HOME YOUR GOING TO BE HERE A LONG TIME!!HA! HA! HA!" |
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