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firejerm
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA

0 posted 2000-12-17 04:12 PM



Closing my eyes
Your image makes me smile
Something not done
In quite a while.
Hearing your voice
And the way you laugh
Made me realize
Forever we'd last.
Making plans
To make passion concrete
Finally conscented
For us to meet.

The Darkness grew
And you lashed out
Seeming not to care
What I thought about.
Your bad days
Then became mine
But in the wrong way
I drew the line.
So much in common
You see me suffer
So with you
I must get tougher.

Don't compare me
To those before
Who broke your heart
All battered and sore.
Talk to me
Don't walk away
Or is it easy for you
With nothing to say?
Love me like
You say that you do
Turning your head
Makes that so untrue.

I deserve a chance
Don't shut me out
Or again easy for you
To just do without?
Take my heart
And beat it down
Entomb it within
This frozen ground.
Harsh my prose may be
But I do speak true
Those times I said
That I love you.

Jeremy T. Sellers
12/17/00
3:56 PM
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"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe


[This message has been edited by firejerm (edited 12-17-2000).]

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Suzanne Arlene
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 377
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2000-12-17 04:49 PM


Oh i liked that alot  . Really made me think.
Job well done   Suzanne

Lady Lost
Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470

2 posted 2000-12-17 04:58 PM


Jeremy,

This is awesome!  It's good to put your foot down once in awhile, she will respect you for that.

...beth

firejerm
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA
3 posted 2000-12-17 05:03 PM


Beth, I don't think so...too much too late  

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-12-17 06:06 PM


Kind of hard for us to offer an opinion in this we don't know all the details.   Just don't dominate her Jeremy there is nothing that deserves that...  Hope you both make it..
Isis

*I believe every time you put your words to paper, you change. Each feeling is set free, and you may follow.....*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.

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