Dark Poetry #2 |
alone, again |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
it's just a hole within my chest the spark of you without the rest the empty, empty emptiness... the ache, the pine no solace... sleep...forever, wake, unrest... everything's been done-- unless-- I could taste you once again... Beloved, twin of soul of mine I sleep with fingers, interwined... in dreams, I grasp your hand to kiss and find my own hand greets my lips... I long to taste you once again... I wake knowing...alone, again... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
wow..you are writing so well today ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Wow! You've captured this so well! Great last line. Take care. ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Touching emotions of the memory of lost love, very well written, with feeling and style, I enjoyed it alot. Thank you, Regards, Olias |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, serenity, the "ache" in this one bleeds forth powerfully and effortlessly. Well done poem, dear. Michael |
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Kevin Rose Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 64Liverpool UK |
Stunning. Faultless. Echos sentiments I have felt so many times, portrays the yearnings that are all to common to feel. The sructure is so simple too..... reading this is a pleasure, a pleasure that remembers so many pains. A truly emotional piece, thankyou. |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133ConcepciĆ³n, Chile |
Wooow Your friend, Caz |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133ConcepciĆ³n, Chile |
Wooow Your friend, Caz It's been raining since you left me. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh My! Amazing, touched the emotion exactly. I am right there with you, Serenity. I have to save this poem, in my heartbreak hotel area. Sandra |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you all so much...I realize I don't often post/reply here...so your tolerance of me is much appreciated. Just a little note to my "sleep" muse---y'see, I have trouble sometimes, and to go to sleep? I imagine myself in the arms of love...sometimes it works...sometimes it backfires. But thanks...Love to you all. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Excellent! You relate those feelings so very well! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Wow, great writing, enjoyed it very much. Know the feeling... Take Care! |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Wow, great writing, enjoyed it very much. Know the feeling... Take Care! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
serenity, wonderful pace set and intensity yuh very nice |
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