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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
My lover, shrouded in darkness painted streaks of hate across porcelain perfection He wills me to look at him boring holes through my heart I cared not to see pain caused by bitter words glaring from once loving eyes, now plotting against me The door to freedom is blocked by tall, immovable anger He waits with sadistic pleasure, eyes gleaming knowing I will try... -R.T. {Tiersdin} 2/00 |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
Wow! This one draws you in, I'll say that. Excellent write, here, and I loved the title. It fits well. Sheila |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this is very beautiful, and especially hanunting to me since i am incredibly clastrophobic. chills. i really liked the "streaks of hate across porcelain." nice work jann elizabeth |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Tiersdin, This was deep with emotion - almost paralyzing... I could feel the dilemma you faced. Excellent poetry. Michael |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Woah! Yeah... draws you in, most definately!  Nicely written. Take care.~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
Try and keep Trying...Excelent Work! take care "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I too love the line "Streaks of hate across porcelain perfection", wonderful imagery, and intense emotion. Excellent work. Regards, Olias |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Tiersden, The title drew me in and the poem swallowed me up, I like very much a very intense poem Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
He wills me to look at him boring holes through my heart I cared not to see pain caused by bitter words glaring from once loving eyes, now plotting against me darn...is all I can say ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Thanks all for your comments. I'm smiling from ear to ear! I'm planning to enjoy more of your works as well! *hugs* -Tier |
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Dream Chaser Junior Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 32South Carolina |
Wow! Great poem. The situation is much like my own. The title is very fitting. Some people get "sadistic pleasure" from tormenting others with their words. Great! Thanks for touching my heart. Angel |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thought I'd peruse the words of a friend.More verse edged in pain and hope. Mike |
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