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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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BROTHER MINE Oh, brother of the Darkling Clan, What voice hears ye this night? Wouldst thou yet smile upon this man? Deny this beggar’s plight? What angels, few and far between, Before thy whims have fell? That all must come to prance and preen This dichotomy of hell. What stars yet shine upon the sky? As blue cascades to black, And vision falls upon the lie Thy facades shan’t hold back. What insurrectionist reply Might kiss thy poisoned lips? To, for now, for-never deny Touch of thy fingertips. Wouldst thou yet dare to call me friend? Thy knife still wet with glee… To see but yet another end To endless misery. Oh, brother of the Darkling Clan, Steady, this voice entails. For I, my friend, am just a man Death readily avails. Michael But dreams of those who dream as I, Aspiringly, are damned and die. EAP |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
This is fantastic Michael!  Thoroughly enjoyed reading... skipped along very nicely.~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Whoa! Michael, you have a TALENT! I've never been able to write in iamb, let alone any other type of beat. The content was also really good. Great imagery! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You are a magnificent poet...glad you are sharing your talent with all the newbies here!!!  |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
*applauds* well done! -Tier |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
taramw, glad you enjoyed it so... fractal007, content has always been far more important than form in my eyes... I would gladly sacrifice meter to exemplify emotion any day of the week. True poetry holds beauty in any form, my friend... Sharon, Dark poetry has always been my forte', you know that. I miss this forum, and all it once meant to me. I hope to be spending alot more time here and making many more friends amongst the "newbies" too. Tiersdin, Thank you very much... ...and thank you all for the kind replies. Michael |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I loved the use of old world language, it adds to the impact, but what I especially like is the unusual rhyme, no cliched "love" and "dove" here, (not that thee is anything wrong with that), you have a talent sir and I enjoyed this piece very much. Regards Olias |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I love the language you use---I wish I knew how to do this-- gotta say it-incredible, michael!!! darklings...yeah. "dichotomy of hell"... grinning over here...love this!!!! |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
I don't know why but this whole poem made me want to say "et tu Brutus" I very much enjoyed the pictures you painted in this one. There's a peace inside us all Let it be your friend It will help you carry on In the end There's a peace inside us all -Creed |
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