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silentsky Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114 |
yeah i guess thats when i found id left my mind in the backseat backseat of the car he and the wind they've stolen my yeah i'm blinder blinder than ever before cause i can't quite think and i gone and left it in the backseat backseat left my heart near a rock at the back of my mind in the backseat of his jag got this feeling this feeling i got it all wrong wrong way round round backwards jag my mind in the back of your car yeah jag it. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Interesting rant here - Hmmm... brings many thoughts to mind... the foremost tho, is that no, your heart wasn't what was left in the backseat.  Peace, Chris |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
I enjoyed this poem. I also liked the way you started it out.  Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This poem was great. I liked the wording of it all. Good job.....  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
i loved your style of confusion. this was a really great piece. "he and the wind... they've stolen my... yeah" i loved that part. jann elizabeth If you can feel that staying human is worthwhile, even when it can't have any result whatever, you've beaten them. -1984 |
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ilph Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78 |
shira your thoughts are gradually taking you into new styles of writing. im enjoying the trip. maybe it was not meant to be, but this one seems to be lighter, ironically, through your hyperbole. i guess its more so just a spiral of confusion. wonderful metaphor josh |
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