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Dark Poetry #2

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LuckyinLove
Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 57
Australia

0 posted 2000-06-25 11:53 PM

Would I miss the sound of waves
how could I spent my summer days
If I went to another place
would the memory of you erase

The love for you is somewhere there
it now mean and ugle, not at all fair
If time meant anything to us
the only way to heal our trust

Do you understand the meaning of truth
or is it long gone with your youth
misguided through your lying ways
nightclubs, ecstasy, a smoky haze....

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

1 posted 2000-06-26 12:25 PM

All such very good questions. I wonder what the answers are? I enjoy your writing style.
Catalinamoon

kynder
Senior Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida

2 posted 2000-06-26 01:10 AM

i love how this ends on an unended note kinda. like maybe you aren't sure you are done either?? excellent work, lucky!!!

kynder

Across the gateway of my heart,
I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!"
But love came laughing by and
Cried "I enter everywhere!!!"

Herbert Shipman

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

3 posted 2000-06-26 02:49 AM

love the work. you need to do as your doing and keep them coming so that i can read and hey i'll be your #1 fan.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

4 posted 2000-06-26 06:36 AM

Great poem here!

Easy to read.

"If I went to another place
would the memory of you erase"

Hmm... running doesn't achieve anything you know. The questions and everything still run ragged through your brain, chewing it up until you scream with pain.

Lots of questions in this one... but it is good!

Joel the wolf
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 1333
Angels Camp

5 posted 2000-06-26 09:54 AM

another place helps, but doesn't do the job. only time does.
love the poem kid.

Joel

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

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