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Inner versus Outer |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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Is imperfection tolerable? I wonder this as I question the level of flaw contrived smiles communicate… I’m more than a statue, my eyes blink profusely and are coloured in light, they’re motionless only when dreaming – a rapid-eyed contradiction - and I shift in the lie my body creates when walking with the tilt of radiance, and the stares… impenetrable beneath the surface of cloth and skin, to the element in I, collapsed. I don’t carry the weight of beauty in my mind. I’m assigned the outer collectivity of poise, the vertical sweep of assessment with a stamp of approval and I think. Thoughts don’t mark paths well – they quaver with truth and desire, more desire than a man’s urge. I’m postured…straight…they never seek the morning rise, the dishevel of unwell or the curl I develop in the night, legs flung and arms askew… substantiated, is beauty in the sway of hip or the stance of real? < !signature--> The wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-07-2000).] |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
A diamond by eye is perfect but flaws may abound The earth is a sphere but is it perfectly round? And though she not fit perfectly within my arms They will adjust to keep her from harm And though flaws cry out as we get older Beauty still remains within the eye of the beholder From your work, from what you speak of from your heart, a more perfect soul, one could not ask for, so lucky be he, who you, does see. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Ron...that is just such a beautiful reply, and poem. Thankyou. I appreciate it. There really is no competition between outer and inner is there? And - when you love someone and who they are inside, the outer usually becomes utterly beautiful also. That is what I have discovered. Big smiles K |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
Wow that was a wonderful poem.It feels like i flipped myself inside out lol  Suzanne |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Severn, you know the secret, which really isn't a secret...just hard for some to see...and unfortunatelt they wander around in life looking for the "beautiful" one. but they only can see skin deep. I've known georgeous girls who where the worst souls on this planet. So as they say, you can't judge a book by it's cover. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Satpsych For sure dear Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Satpsych doubled! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
What a wonderful read. Thanks for sharing. Hope to read more of you!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey K.... Satpsych Tripled < !signature-->"If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 11-08-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi Ron, indeed a beautiful reply for Kamla .and unfortunatelt they wander around in life looking for the "beautiful" one. but they only can see skin deep..........Yes Ron, very shallow beings and those that see only skin deep, receive only skin deep don't you think ? again beautiful reply Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
A very unpoetic WOW is all I can come up with here. I just love everything about this. Sandra |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
How eloquently you have portrayed this concept.. I have truly enjoyed reading this! Thank you. Crakker Life is a journey.. not a destination.. - unknown |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Suzanne - well, sometimes I think we can get that way! Lol...and end up not knowing ourselves. Thankyou for your reply. Ron - well, yes. I agree...perhaps sometimes, having those 'model' looks can make a person 'ugly' on the inside...sad fact of human nature hey? Sharon, Jamie and Mmy - ROTF...I phillaud you all... Javier - thankyou! I don't have time to post as much as I would like...but I'm aiming for it! Sandra - your unpoetic wow is music to my ears lol...thankyou hon. Crakker - thankYOU for reading and appreciating...  K The wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
i know this poem is a little old (if you choose to call it that),but severn i just wanted to say how great i think it is,i was browsing around through some other "rooms" or whatever and came across this,it's really wonderful,your words are so i don't know...perfect seems over used,but that's what they are. Loved this poem. "All art is an expression of pain."~John Lennon |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Psatpsych---QUADRUPLE!!! most awesome, lady, but yes, you ARE.... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
S F - You know I really appreciate hearing that...perfect hey? ...I would find it hard to agree with you heh...at any rate I am just so happy that I can reach someone so much with my words...hugs and thanks Karen - lol@you... K |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
i'm just sad i missed this the first time around. you make such a great point. i find myself fighting this more and more every day. in others as well as myself. happy holidays. jann elizabeth |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Everything is beautiful, it just takes a special person to see that... Bravo on this one.. Isis *The heart of education is the education of the heart...* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Bravo! This is absolutely an excellent piece of writing. It is well punctuated, formated, delivered and smashing with imagery and emotion right from the soul. Well done young lady! (well I can say that I'm 50 after all "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Lana Member
since 2000-12-26
Posts 68 |
I'm impressed, very much so. This is full of layers of thought. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is wonderful. . . as is the poet. . . really excellent K. . . glad that I didn't miss it. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I had to reread this, it is such a thoughtful and deep poem. I wonder if these questions will ever really be answered. Happy New Year Sandra |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
Love this poem. It is true that inner beauty over powers outter. This poem is a wonderful way of telling that truth. This is going into my library for sure! Wonderful words. *JOE* |
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