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The Day My World Died...
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The Day My World Died... |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470
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The day that you left me I felt so empty inside It ended on a Wednesday And that’s the day I died My heart cries out for you And I will never forget…. A picture of what could’ve been Provides a lifetime of regret I look back now and suffer My screams are silent, like yours Lost in a world of loneliness I cry behind closed doors There is no chance I will forget You are permanent in my memory There are so many reminders …in all the faces that I see… I am so angry at my decision I could have done it if I tried I believed there was no choice I believed in my own lie It only took five minutes Painless, so they say It just so happened that they lied Because the pain won’t go away. [This message has been edited by Lady Lost (edited 11-03-2000).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hey, I believe my world died on a Wednesday, also. And we were writing about it at the same time.. Interesting, parallel lives or something? Excellent poem, sure conveys the emotion. Sandra |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Seems like wednesday is the dreaded day of the week.hurtful poem. be well Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
There are many choices that can be made..and while I think mine may have been a little different, the loss is there, and you die a little more each day. Great expression, lady.. this touched me deeply. Sheila Life is a journey.. not a destination.. - unknown |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Sometimes a poem says so much more than the words first lend themselves to. This is one such, leading off with a fairly complex, yet vague idea and building pain and regret from that. These poems are the ones where I am almost loathe to say well done, because it hurts so much that "good job" seems trite. Chris |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yes i feel your pain.....i hope you keep that head up high and you stay ok.....on and if this does help any....you are very beautiful....truth.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
maybe, it's actually the day a new life begins...and you just don't realize it yet....wonderfully expressed ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Written very well  Take care.~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"my screams are silent, like yours..." I admire the courage of this piece--and I don't offer any advice, either. But I could relate...and while I make no choices for anyone else--I, too, realized too late that it was the wrong decision for ME. Sorry for the dialogue here, but I'm still angry. No one told me I would grieve. Either way, you live with your decision for the rest of your life. The choice IS ours. If this was from personal experience, I do offer you the company of HUGS. PEACE. |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
"It only took five minutes Painless, so they say It just so happened that they lied Because the pain won’t go away." Never painless and it seems to never go away...good poem you wrote it ver well good luck ~AngieDon't fear failure so much that you refuse to try new things. The saddest summary of a life contains three descriptions: could have, might have, and should have. --Louis Boone |
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