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Click
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since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA

0 posted 2000-10-25 09:49 PM




Watch as she,
exumes the grave.
unmarked...
where my heart,
is laid,
out in state.
No dignity
in death
or its final state.
   Please don't,
it's too late.

An ember still
smolders...
Hope does not leave
as in the tomb
it awaits
until...
it is forced to burn,
once more a flame
Who are you,
to disrespect?
my self imposed grief.

Click



© Copyright 2000 Click - All Rights Reserved
Suzanne Arlene
Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2000-10-25 10:02 PM


That was a real good read.  I actually read it twice to absorbe it all.   Suzanne
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

2 posted 2000-10-26 07:31 AM


Damn fine read here...


Hope does not leave
as in the tomb
it awaits
until...
it is forced to burn,


like that in particular...

K


"He looked across the
silky surface of the Severn...
it was a famously difficult
river with fierce tides..."


From Jack Maggs


catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-10-26 11:41 AM


Oh, this is awesome. Truly enjoyed this, very strong image, and I have to agree with all the words.
Take care.
Sandra

Ron K. Fox
Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925

4 posted 2000-10-26 01:02 PM


I agree with sven...those same words are captivating, all of it is. Ron
Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
5 posted 2000-10-26 01:09 PM


i also agree that this was a lovely read, as well as a very interesting way of describing this situation.

jann elizabeth

If you can feel that staying human is worthwhile, even when it can't have any result whatever, you've beaten them.
-1984


JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-10-26 06:14 PM


This one click's so well...James
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