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Dark Poetry #2

Shadows of Shadows

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2000-10-20 07:16 AM

The day found me waking
Before the sun was breaking
Sleeping without dreams
Too quickly about in going
Too quietly without the knowing
Nothing as it seems.
Walls of glimmer black windows
Falls to shimmer gray shadows,
Electronic eyes watch endlessly,
Twirling shadows of black dust
Highlight colors of dull rust,
Solar Cyclops returns relentlessly.
Slipping to shadows I travel
Letting the morning unravel.

Gloom 2000

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

1 posted 2000-10-20 08:44 AM

I like this one!!

~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

2 posted 2000-10-20 08:48 AM

Prof,
you could certainly teach me a thing or two about unravelling or ravelling for that matter. I got caught in the rhythm and couldn't stop until the very last word.
Be well
Kethry

Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2000-10-20 12:27 PM

Thank you, taramw,
Glad you enjoyed the poem
And responded to my writings

Thank you, Kethry,
Not so sure I could teach a busybody how to ravel,
But life unraveling seems to be easy for me.
Your kind words soothe.

Gloom

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

4 posted 2000-10-20 01:44 PM

Like this a lot. Unraveling, I can relate to!
Catalinamoon

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

5 posted 2000-10-21 07:41 AM

Thank you, catalinamoon
for responding to my unraveled words.

Gloom

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

6 posted 2000-10-21 06:37 PM

This was a great poem! I liked it's sort of Orwellian feel

Electronic eyes watch endlessly,
Twirling shadows of black dust
Highlight colors of dull rust,

Those were my favourite lines in the poem. This is a great one. Keep up the good work.

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