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Antithesis of Pleasure
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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It's always the same, each empty night slides into the next, hardly a difference observed. He looks blankly toward me, we pass eachother as strangers, barely a word exchanged. What do you say to the walking dead anyway? Short years, morphed into eternity. I am in a coma, the vaguest memory of love slipping toward oblivion. I feel nothing except a touch of resentment. He is consuming my time, whats left of it, with meaningless babble and his interminable presence. I want him to go away... My heart aches with the absence of love. My body craves comfort, the hunger bites into me a little more each night. I see the shreds of what used to be me, fluttering onto the floor. The debris is growing. I will take them with me, whatever bits are left, when I leave. Someone may need them later. |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
This is a powerful poem  *sigh* hurts sometimes doesn't it? The way you ended your poem was very very good. |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
Very powerful...... What do you say to the walking dead anyway? I especially liked that. "Suicides have already betrayed the body. Still born, they don't always die, bu dazzled, they can't forget a drug so sweet that even children would |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Yes cat, I under stand this consept so well. Hell I lived this for so long. And the Walking Dead is right. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
My marriage exactly....for so many years. One day we just sat down and talked....she went where she was happy and I stayed where I was happy. Funny thing...she's saving a fortune in therapy bills....and no more prozac. Me? I no longer have to sleep on "my" side of the bed....afraid to touch or be touched. You really captured it well.....excellent. Hardrock |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
love the feel you give this work all well all of your work. as always love it . I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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LuckyinLove Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 57Australia |
Those words make me glad I am single, I have seen it so many times people are together but forget why. |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
without that mental stimulation we feel like the walking dead, and then the emotions die too, I relate so well. Very well thought out, Nice!!!! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Cat, an aching poem. an excellent poem, but please move on, don't let your heart linger in pain. Take care. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Absolutely awesome writing! you have some fabulous phrasing and lines in here.... i'm a little awe struck at the moment because for the last 9 years, up until january when the dearly departed finally departed and i woke up from the dead, i could have written this myself.... thanks for a wonderful read... will find more of your work tomorrow |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i too see my life in this...guess i'll take a lesson from you and "take whatever bits are left when i leave".....these are great words deeply felt!! whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Cat, this is heart wrenching. I took the tattered bits with me when I left but it didn't make me whole. Now I'm alone and much more whole than I ever was in a relationship. Be well Lynne "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
catalina... This is very, very, very good!!! I must say, it sounds like a subject a lot of us are soooooooo familiar with... Excuse me, while I turn my printer on!!! I have only one goal in life.. It Is: To have more than one goal in Life!! ~ ~ by Sunny ~ ~ |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
"What do you say to the walking dead anyway?" This line is really great..... Wonderful poem, such emotion! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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Dedreia Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 172Kokomo, Indiana, United States |
This so reminds me of my parents before they divorced. They had become strangers in a marriage of convenience. Very well written. Dee... and Sandra...like you always tell me, Follow your heart. "It doesn't matter who you love, or how you love, but that you love" Rod McKuen |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
very well said is right, I know, I live this too......was directed to this poem by a friend......and am glad to have read, it is wonderful writing ......sorry to hear that there is more of us in this world though that live this..... |
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