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melroseg Junior Member
since 2000-09-29
Posts 16 |
There is no peace For the broken hearted. Alone in sobs and tears Wet hands, wet face, wet shirt Afraid of the endless Possibilities That may or may not come to chance Insane thoughts fill My mind Death Betrayal Carelessness They all stand to take The one thing I love most My love My soulmate My eternal fire My best friend Forever |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
sometimes love just isn't really worth it, is it? you just gotta keep strivin, keep fightin'. this is a very raw piece of work. it has a good rhythm and flow, and it is still very honest. good work. and Welcome to Passions. I hope your stay is long and enjoyable. The bellhop will come for your bags shortly.  < !signature-->That's the sound of a bottle when it's hollow; when you swallow it all wallow and drown in your sorrow and tomorrow your probably gonna do it again. [This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 09-29-2000).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi, thanks for reading my poem. I can see that you are in a turmoil, as I am. This is a great poem, very expressive of the fear, and insecurity. I have all of it. Good luck, and welcome to Dark Passions. Sandra / Catalinamoon |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Welcome to passions!!Good one!!!I would have to agree with Ethan when he said you just gotta keep strivin, keep fightin'. Dont let anything get in your way either. I hope to see more work by you!  It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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gjam Member
since 2000-08-23
Posts 85Arkansas |
This is great..I can relate more than I care to admit.....but I know one thing...all the pain goes away....and only then can you continue your search with an open mind and a free heart....there is always hope....Greg |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey - welcome...! I know it's hard to find your way sometimes through this 'thing' called life... keep writing - it really does help. Good piece! Oh and check your email...  K |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Hey, welcome to passions! I hope you'll enjoy it here like I do! Very good poem, great expression. Hang on, this will be better! Hope everything works out for you, take care! "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
hi! Welcome to DP! Very good poem! Understand what you have expressed here... take care ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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silentsky Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114 |
thank you, i needed to read this poem. welcome to passionate forums. i look forward to reading more of your stuff... thanks again, shira |
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darkstar Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230Port Richey, Fl, USA |
Wow...I liked your poem a lot...welcome to DP... Dark Star |
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CitiZen-One Member
since 2000-09-22
Posts 84New Mexico |
indeed, i too have been there, its not a world one wants to be in. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
melancholy...James |
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