Dark Poetry #2 |
Wonder How? |
Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Splitting my veins I let the blood ooze , Trickling with a burning desire my fingers broaden, Thoughts of your surmise around my neck tightens, Choking on truth I wheeze for fabrication, Reality besieged with the being of its creation, Veins overflowing with deception now, Such sadness of my part, you wonder how? Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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melroseg Junior Member
since 2000-09-29
Posts 16 |
I really liked this poem. It is very graphic. The imagery that is used with the painful description made me feel the hurt that is being expressed. The use of physical pain to describe emotional pain is very effective. |
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bluebrdy65 Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276Gladys, |
Oh My !! such a powerful poem. Great Job |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Dark knight wish that i show you guys the real world and so I did Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
dark and intriguing. I like it |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
I try to be as evil as I can be. HEHE. Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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