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seraphin
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since 2000-09-24
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0 posted 2000-09-25 04:11 PM



Tender dreams locked in my mind,
of a curious nature,
a curious kind.
We two, holding hands,
in a spot we find,
for slow dancing,
under the night sky.

Tired of being told what to do,
when to do it,
do it with who.
When all I really want is you,
slow dancing,
under the night sky.

Can't bear the fear anymore,
anticipating,
the slam of the door.
Want to free up my soul,
for a little more,
slow dancing,
under the night sky.

If in the morning I should die,
tell all who ask,
the reason why,
was so forever,
I could try
slow dancing,
under the night sky.



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1 posted 2000-09-25 04:40 PM


Great ending. This does not belong in dark passions. j/k.  

Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



ilph
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since 2000-07-28
Posts 78

2 posted 2000-09-25 06:28 PM



I disagree.

If in the morning i should die..seems depressing enough for dp.

I think this is a well-crafted, heartfelt piece. I especially like..

in a spot we find.

bluebrdy65
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since 2000-05-16
Posts 276
Gladys,
3 posted 2000-09-25 08:19 PM


Great Job
very heartfelt
I agree
Blue

seraphin
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since 2000-09-24
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Michigan
4 posted 2000-09-25 10:47 PM


Thank you all. @}~~>~~~~
LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

5 posted 2000-09-26 04:23 PM


This is great, I loved it. The title really caught my attention, love the night sky... and slow dancing  
Good job!
Take Care!

"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


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