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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
the wind hushes outside the balmy air cools I drowse... ...so sleepy I wait for you, unwilling to succumb to the tempting, cottony black until I see you. "You are my moon you are my sun Heaven knows what you are..." The heavens only know that until I feel your cool hands, your warm smile, sleep shall not have me. [This message has been edited by Portia (edited 06-23-2000).] |
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gothicmoth Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 89 |
This is an excellent poem. The flow and the mystery make me read it over and over again. It makes one wonder who or what the speaker is waiting for. I can see it as a worried vigil and also a pledge of love with vigilance. A stunning piece of work. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
What a wonderful piece!!  Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I thought it was your old man at first but then no cold hands and warm breath. Help, I have no desire to wait up for anyone like this. great I enjoy this kid. the not knowing. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i feel that sleep sometimes will take me into death and i will not wake up. ilove this of of yours as well keep it up. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
this poem makes me want to sleep so that when what i am waiting for arrives, i will be well rested and won't have to sleep the whole time!!!!!!!!! wonderful imagery!! way to go!! kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Nights of waiting and wondering..I enjoyed this, I had a my own image with this one, Great Job |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Portia....makes me wonder how many times someone has awaited my arrival....and I never do. Guilt trip here. Thanks....Hardrock |
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