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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
grease and joy a dully bitter taste rings liquid through cavities electricity plays the cochlea a song no one else remembers: an anthem for childhood why are you so ugly? ugly ugly ugly once, understanding- or, diluted- acceptance but satellites fell the sun god was sold and delilah's scissors scrubbed and laid to rest in barbicide so feel me up and get it over with so i can sink back down |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Wow Jannel! "so feel me up and get it over with so i can sink back down" Excellent ending! Hope all is well. Take care!  ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wow Janell, what a poem. Really powerful to read and full of pain. Hope you are okay. Be well Kethry. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
I liked the technique - was it born of frustration? That's the way it goes with me sometimes.... |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Frustration and pain - indeed fueled a great work here. This is a great image of when you are at that point, and sort of don't want to care anymore what happens to you.. but still you care.. Well Done *Friendship is a horizon - which expands whenever we approach it...* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
thank you everyone for your replies. (and your concern, but i'm fine )this was from this summer when i was at home, lonely, and melancholy. much love,jann elizabeth Don't take any wooden nickels When you sell your soul Devil lover, time awaits you Now the party's over You're on your own -the eels |
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eegood Junior Member
since 1999-11-16
Posts 41Chicago,IL |
As Jackie Gleason would say, "You're the greatest!" good piece of work |
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