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ilph Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78 |
Fingers can touch but they can point also words linger too much, when theyre pointed, moreso so i have my umbrella and i walk through the pain and that person i tell her dont do that again cause ive fixed up this leak too many times and i may be too meek but shes played with my mind and im wanting some weather a little more kind its a dream i can only rescind. Thrashing the wind turns me around and i took off my hat and i sat and i frowned. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
ilph, I like this it's different. At first I thought you were talking about gossip but the end had a twist. be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Hmm... this poem of yours sounds soooo lost Josh  And please do not frown for long... after all, the wind always does blow a different way, in the end  Terrific piece! "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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silentsky Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114 |
josh a beautiful poem...i really like it especially the lines: thrashing the wind turns me around written very well, i like the free style and the way you feel the frustration and the searching helplessness. shira |
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