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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
universal I could make mystic you I could make myself taboo I could iconise your eyes Could make myself your prize I could unveil eternity Inside of you Outside of me I could make our life resound With echoes of the truth we found I could electrocute the air The air we breathe The air we share < !signature--> Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo [This message has been edited by lotharingia (edited 08-30-2000).] |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
You know what? That hurt my head…. Ouch, it still hurts…must take medicine.…mmmm, drugs… Ok, I like this part the best. “I could make mystic you I could make myself taboo I could iconise your eyes Could make myself your prize I could unveil eternity Inside of you Outside of me I could make our life resound With echoes of the truth we found I could electrocute the air The air we breathe The air we share” Well, basically, I like the whole thing…hehe, good work! Lalalala! ---------------------- Spreading insanity, one post at a time “Writing about darkness comes easily for me. I just close my eyes and write what I |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
WOW love this love this love this... did i mention how much i love this? im keeping this one! ~Dawn  "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I would have to say that this is so good!!! I love it. And I agree with Deranger with that being the best part!!~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Oh WOoOW!!! what an interesting thing... I enjoyed it so much!!! I can electrocute the air The air we breathe The air we share... Bravo!!! |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
Wow, a tremendous homecoming! This is a real treat.... Terrific poem, great words and images... Welcome back to the dark (but cosy) cavern of haunted dreams!  |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh this is just wonderful. Great images and thoughts. Perfect. catalinamoon |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
OH! I ADORE this piece....it has such a rhythm, I love it, awesome work!! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I could make mystic you I could make myself taboo I could iconise your eyes Could make myself your prize I could unveil eternity Inside of you Outside of me I could make our life resound With echoes of the truth we found I could electrocute the air The air we breathe The air we share. Oh Yeessss I like this! Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Rhythm?,...Yeah, you've got that all right. Uta...at some point in my little life I am going to get you to read your work. They always have this voice to them. Your words, they just talk themselves. I don't know how to explain it, but it's like this power or something that they hold that makes them echo, makes them stick. I've missed your work too. I definately like it when you're around. Take care U. *Peace. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
LO, this is electrifying. Great poem. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Tremendous Uta!! "I could make myself taboo" -- Woah!  Thanks for sharing."A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Thank you Thank you ALL!  I'm usually too lazy to reply to my own posts, but as this is poem 1999 in DP 2, I thought I'd celebrate! Deranger, I'm sorry I hurt your head!  Did you know that you are cute? hehehe Princess, Keeping it? I am flattered! Erin, thanks I lOvE It WhEn YoU WrItE lIkE THiS!LM, glad you liked it Allan, how sweet you are I don't post THAT infrequently though!Cat, perfect? Hmm, thanks, I'm getting quite big-headed here! Chibi, thanks. It feels good to write adored poetry! and Kethry, thanks too, I'm glad you liked it! Fire, you burning Love. Thanks! I'm better at reading other people's poems though, I get embarassed reading my own! Just imagine a British accent with a slight mid-Altantic twang. Bri, Thanks, I'm glad I could electrify you. Can't wait to see you at a rave after some "ouiskies", btw Tara, Thanks! I love it when you say Whoa! < !signature--> Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo [This message has been edited by lotharingia (edited 09-01-2000).] |
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Forrest Cain Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 306Chas.,W.V. USA |
This was high voltage. I'm still in shock. My hairs standing on end. Sounds more than just static. It could stop more than hearts. Might need an electrician or cardiologist. That was fun. Nice write. forrest |
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