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lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

0 posted 2000-08-30 01:07 PM


universal

I could make mystic you
I could make myself taboo
I could iconise your eyes
Could make myself your prize
I could unveil eternity
Inside of you
Outside of me
I could make our life resound
With echoes of the truth we found
I could electrocute the air
The air we breathe
The air we share
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Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo






[This message has been edited by lotharingia (edited 08-30-2000).]

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Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
1 posted 2000-08-30 01:15 PM


You know what?  That hurt my head…. Ouch, it still hurts…must take medicine.…mmmm, drugs…

Ok, I like this part the best.

“I could make mystic you
I could make myself taboo
I could iconise your eyes
Could make myself your prize
I could unveil eternity
Inside of you
Outside of me
I could make our life resound
With echoes of the truth we found
I could electrocute the air
The air we breathe
The air we share”

Well, basically, I like the whole thing…hehe, good work!

Lalalala!  



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“Writing about darkness comes easily for me. I just close my eyes and write what I

poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
2 posted 2000-08-30 01:16 PM


WOW
love this love this love this...
did i mention how much i love this?
im keeping this one!
~Dawn  

"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos



Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-08-30 01:20 PM


I would have to say that this is so good!!! I love it. And I agree with Deranger with that being the best part!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

4 posted 2000-08-30 04:52 PM


Oh WOoOW!!!
what an interesting thing... I enjoyed it so much!!!

I can electrocute the air
The air we breathe
The air we share...

Bravo!!!

allan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620
On the road
5 posted 2000-08-30 05:01 PM


Wow, a tremendous homecoming! This is a real treat.... Terrific poem, great words and images...

Welcome back to the dark (but cosy) cavern of haunted dreams!  

catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
6 posted 2000-08-30 09:44 PM


Oh this is just wonderful. Great images and thoughts. Perfect.
catalinamoon

ChibiDeathscythe
Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128

7 posted 2000-08-30 10:28 PM


OH! I ADORE this piece....it has such a rhythm, I love it, awesome work!!
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
8 posted 2000-08-31 09:12 AM


I could make mystic you
I could make myself taboo
I could iconise your eyes
Could make myself your prize
I could unveil eternity
Inside of you
Outside of me
I could make our life resound
With echoes of the truth we found
I could electrocute the air
The air we breathe
The air we share.

Oh Yeessss I like this!
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

9 posted 2000-08-31 09:22 AM


~Rhythm?,...Yeah, you've got that all right. Uta...at some point in my little life I am going to get you to read your work. They always have this voice to them. Your words, they just talk themselves. I don't know how to explain it, but it's like this power or something that they hold that makes them echo, makes them stick. I've missed your work too. I definately like it when you're around. Take care U. *Peace.
brian madden
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
10 posted 2000-08-31 05:36 PM


LO, this is electrifying. Great poem.

"I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy

taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

11 posted 2000-09-01 03:15 AM


Tremendous Uta!!  

"I could make myself taboo"

-- Woah!    Thanks for sharing.

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
12 posted 2000-09-01 06:10 AM


Thank you Thank you ALL!  
I'm usually too lazy to reply to my own posts, but as this is poem 1999 in DP 2, I thought I'd celebrate!

Deranger, I'm sorry I hurt your head!   Did you know that you are cute? hehehe  

Princess, Keeping it? I am flattered!  

Erin, thanks   I lOvE It WhEn YoU WrItE lIkE THiS!

LM, glad you liked it  

Allan, how sweet you are   I don't post THAT infrequently though!

Cat, perfect? Hmm, thanks, I'm getting quite big-headed here!

Chibi, thanks. It feels good to write adored poetry!  

and Kethry, thanks too, I'm glad you liked it!  

Fire, you burning Love. Thanks! I'm better at reading other people's poems though, I get embarassed reading my own! Just imagine a British accent with a slight mid-Altantic twang.

Bri, Thanks, I'm glad I could electrify you. Can't wait to see you at a rave after some "ouiskies", btw  

Tara, Thanks! I love it when you say Whoa!  
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Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo




[This message has been edited by lotharingia (edited 09-01-2000).]

Forrest Cain
Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 306
Chas.,W.V. USA
13 posted 2000-09-02 07:59 PM


This was high voltage. I'm still in shock.
My hairs standing on end. Sounds more than just static. It could stop more than hearts.
Might need an electrician or cardiologist.
That was fun. Nice write.

forrest

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