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Asylum Windows |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia 
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I witnessed the glory of the sky On many a lonesome day But never to feel caressing breeze For a pane of glass protected those secrets I traced my fingertips gently Over the smooth transparency But it did not relent to my fawning Remained indifferent to my need I hated that moment and it’s lingering It’s the clearest vision contained in memory A time when they needed no bars to hold me Because I was already broken, suffocated Granted no liberty to breathe living air Where even forced sleep proved no escape And countless young eyes blinked empty We just gave into disease Many years have passed, I’m constantly haunted I can’t speak aloud for fear of being heard Because I just can’t bear the infinite solitude Of staring through that vicious window again We have all shared many sorrows and strife But some of you have been jaded Please try to accept the open hand of guidance Because there is no kind asylum behind those locked windows. whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Interesting read, Window bars and such don't bother me, anymore, they've changed meanings. Which once kept me in, now just keep the others out, and I prefer my solitude. A thoughtful piece you write. Gloom |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very interesting story, and something to think about. No asylum to be found, especially not in the so named place. Awesome.. cat.... |
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JSage Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91Nashua, NH USA |
I don't know how literal that poem is meant to be... you have no idea how closely I related. Only one of my poems (actually a song)touches upon my simliar experience. I was 15 when I wrote it. It's called "I know her." I don't plan on posting it on this site, but you can find it on my homepage, which you can find in my profile.  Keep up with beautifully put, truthful writing. Those poems are windows to your soul. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Bars just metal and metal rusts... I think if you test these bars you will find that they will break off, on the count of three...1,2,3. See the window is now open, shall we fly to the unknown  "We have all shared many sorrows and strife But some of you have been jaded Please try to accept the open hand of guidance Because there is no kind asylum behind those locked windows". Dawn, I often see bars sometimes open doors, I guess when we find ourselves in a locked room we should move to an open one, but while asylums trap us they also protect us. I think this asylum has a garden. Wonderfully written piece, I am just ranting here so I will shut up. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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moshpit Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143cebu, philippines |
Many years have passed, I’m constantly haunted I can’t speak aloud for fear of being heard Because I just can’t bear the infinite solitude Of staring through that vicious window again i love this line, and i don't ever want to feel this infinite solitude. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dawn, you're right in everything you say in this piece, except one, on occasions we need the asylum to keep us safe from ourselves until we learn to deal with what's inside. However wherever possible we need the asylum of friends as well as trained personnel. Thank you for such a heart wrenching poem. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
Gloom: thank you for your reply! its good that you enjoy your solitude, i should learn by your example. Cat: thank you for stopping in!and yes i suppose it must be something to think about, because i tend to think about it alot! JSage: thank you for commenting! i did go to your site and i must say i really enjoyed what i read there! Brian:i like gardens! LOL thank you for helping me open that window...been so long since i tested those bars, i never realized they could be so weathered and worn!! Moshpit: thank you! i hope you dont ever end up experiencing that solitude either! Kethry: thank you, you are such a sweet poet friend...you are right,those asylums are there to help protect.....sometimes hard to see it that way. whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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