Dark Poetry #2 |
If I had known... |
LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
If I had known Life wouldn't be the same once you are gone If I had known I'd long to hear your voice over the phone If I had known My loneliness would fill my every bone If I had known... If I had known I'd miss you I'd hold you tight so you won't fade and gently kiss you... I would make sure you know each moment spent with you is blissful Love you is what I'd do If I had known how much I'd miss you... If I had known how much I had to gain... I'd give myself to you without a shame, I'd tremble every time you call my name, And carefully I'd guard our passion's flame. If I had known, I'd make sweet love to you And pick the stars and moon To give to you at dawn. If I had known, Today I'd be with you and not alone... Anybody thinks I should show this to him? Will it work? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Yes..take a chance..if you have nothing to lose and it won't hurt if he rejects you! Good poem. |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
deVine...Of course it will hurt! rejection is never taken painlessly... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I wrote a poem very similar, but shorter. Same sentiment anyway. I say that showing it to him would be a good idea if you have any inclination that he still cares for you. I have done this actually, and though in the end it didn't work out , We did reunite for awhile and he was very touched by the poem, and I think it was worth it. At least you can say you tried, you gave it your best shot, and that feels better than regrets, and if only's. At least to me. In addition to the little bit of rambling, I want to say it was a very touching and well done poem. Catalinamoon |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Thanks Cat... If he still cares I'm gonna find out today through my friend... If he doesn't, I'm not even gonna try, there are plenty more fish in the sea. |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i hope to find out that everything works out well for you then! great, heartfelt poem! ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Thanks a lot Dawn I hope so too, I already see sparks of hope, therefore my last poem's called "You're back..." |
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