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The Deceitful One
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The Deceitful One |
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Jaded_Innocence New Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 7USA |
How can one so hurtful help so much? When all is lost, they turn to comfort you, but does he really care at all? or is he like the rest?...using you for everything. Bribing you secretly with every word... setting you up, carrying you higher and higher whatever you do, don't let go of hope. The deceitful one will attack the moment you do. Letting you think it's okay to loosen your grip, telling you that you won't fall Damn that deceit looks so nice from afar, but once hope is released, he'll push you down, Helplessly, you'll fall, right into his game, just another pawn to protect the king, it was so easy to reel you in, too easy really, Told a few lies, made you believe he would help, He let you down once, he'll do it again. Never trust...the deceitful one. |
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the applicant New Member
since 2000-08-16
Posts 8england |
~jaded, i can, unfortunatly, relate to this one. you use language very well, and i like the struture of this one. i especially like the line; Damn that deceit looks so nice from afar, - it sums up the poem very well. xxx "Is my life so intriguing? Is it for this you widen your eye-rings?" ~sylvia plath~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Same guy as in my poem, "Have a Care"! Damn he gets around. This is a good one! cat... Words are things, and a small drop of ink, falling, like dew, upon a thought produces that which makes thousands, perhaps millions think. Lord Byron |
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darkstar Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230Port Richey, Fl, USA |
Really good poem...don't I know that scenerio... Dark Star |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Yes it's a hard lesson to learn, when they fail us once, we should learn and know it will happen again, but human nature, love, hope etc. then convince us to give them the benefit of the doubt and another go, and another, and another!! Sometime though you have to stand up and shout 'No more' when you realise it is a catch 22 situation and he'll never change... Been there, done that!! Great stuff  *Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..* Isis ~ Sovereign of the Spirit |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Hiya Amy! Great poem...and see everybody thinks so too...I told ya you could write. Keep'em coming! I wish you could hear the child that cries in my flesh and makes my bones ache -Jewel ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
Very Nice. And the moral of the story is so true. Deepak |
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