Dark Poetry #2 |
Imagine |
LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Imagine, different twist of fate A life in which I'm not too late We meet much sooner in that life Before you choose HER as a wife. Imagine, different circumstance Suppose we'd really had a chance In equal status, equal age Back then, you weren't yet engaged... Imagine, different destiny If one could shape up history Just tell me now and set me free Would you love me? Would you pick me? This is onl my second poem, so don't judge me too harshly.. |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
we arent harsh here!*smile* this is a very nice poem....and it asks questions i think many of us ask when we "lose chances".....Welcome to Passions! looking forward to more! ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Thanks a lot Dawn Glad to join aboard! )) |
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Chained2illusions Junior Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 45Elyria, Oh *at the moment* |
LM, anyone who would judge this harshly..has never known the pain of loving someone that belongs to another. Its really good..and really hits home for myself. Please keep writing. Im new too.. Denise There is fire inside us all..it sparks with just the match. |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Thanks Denise I've read you poem too and loved it, thank you very much. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! We are never harsh here. This has such a sadness to it..how many times have we all met someone only to 'imagine' what if...? Please check your email for a special welcome! |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Thank you DeVine, it really means a lot to have some feedback |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
A nice piece of work & welcome to the family my dear LOL what makes you think we are gonna be harsh with you |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Welcome to Passions. I like this it's almost a "What if" type of poem. Look forward to reading more of your work. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Thanks Kethry and CrEaTuRe for the support I just wasn't sure if my little poem can measure up to all those fantastic stuff I've been reading here.... |
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Lil OnE Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234Pasco County. Fl. |
LM... I read this yesterday, and thought I had posted a reply, but I didn't. *Forgive me*? I loved this one, and feel the same about my ex fiancee. It was too late... he chose others many times. Now he wants me back, but I must be strong. I'm rambling now, so forgive me once more. I loved it. Like I said... Keep it up. btw... welcome to passions! Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken. ~Lil OnE~ |
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Kirsty24 Junior Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 40Australia |
LM - this is a very nice poem.. It hits places for those of us who have been in a similar circumstance |
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