Dark Poetry #2 |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Frozen in the moment, my heart sealed in stone. Knowing beyond a doubt, I will not survive alone. I knew I could do this, but I never wanted to. Nothing more for me to say, I'm still waiting for you. Never saw it coming, but the feelin's back. In my heart of hearts, I detect a crack. Never thought I'd feel this way, No God,please not again. I don't want to be here, looking at where I've been. My mind goes to happier times, shows me how it was. When I ask you "why?" I only hear "because." My heart just wants to stop, my mind begins to race. And if we don't get there soon, you'll kill me with this pace. I've tried to keep up, but I am failing fast. I will always love you, even at the last. I can't stop how I feel, no more than stop the rain. I only wish I knew, how to stop your pain. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~This sort of seems like it just pumped itself right out of your head and heart. It flows and has such a message to it. Very from the heart of whoever it comes from. Take care. *Peace. |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
heck this sound like something right out of my head. ZOWSERS! Really, I like this style of writing, it's from the heart and soul. very heartfelt and that's what we try to do, to reach other souls. thank you . Joel I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i love your words, questions, and format great poem for your heart keep it up. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Click..like me, you write in rhyme and meter...great piece of work, good timing and word placement....but it's the soul that comes through all the architecture that makes poetry really good...and you have captured that soul well. Hardrock |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
oh click..... the line i detect a crack. man you are good. i love your work. gives me hope sometimes. thanks!! kynder A woman to a man is But a mere chapter, But a man to a woman Is an entire book.-- Kynder Howell |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Great writing. i really enjoyed this one.....you kinda had to keep reading to find out what it's all about. i like that,adds more suspense or something. excellent. swampfaeryie And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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sash Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125 |
Great writing Click! I always knew you had it in you bud. Sorry You are in so much pain right now...Sometimes there's just not enough fruit salad in the world... Your Friend, Sash |
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