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lotharingia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

0 posted 2000-08-09 04:44 AM

Fatal

Drag me down
With you
Let me drown
In you
In your
Deadly gaze
Let me suffocate
In you
In your
Cruel embrace
Let me
Wait
For the
Touch
Of fate

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2000-08-09 04:48 AM

Loptharingia, It's short and not so sweet, but very POW-ER-FUL.
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2000-08-09 08:28 AM

Yes, I like this style, it gives you so much opportunity to see your own vision, as well as the poets. Beautiful. "Let me wait for the touch of fate" I'm still waiting...
Cat....

Wren
Member

since 2000-07-05

Posts 312

3 posted 2000-08-09 08:35 AM

Nicely put! Good post...interesting angle on love!
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

4 posted 2000-08-09 09:01 AM

~Strong title. Very cool poem Uta. I've been kinda busy the past couple days,...and have been missing some awesome stuff.

. Love your take on things Uta. Take care. *Peace.

Deborah1
Senior Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 653
New Hampshire

5 posted 2000-08-09 11:57 AM

The reader walks with you through this, and a nice unique style here!! Says alot, and I enjoyed the read very much!! Another really good one!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

allan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 620
On the road

6 posted 2000-08-09 12:13 PM

'Liked the little hesitations, breaths, change of step... Darkly tempting...

Hardrock
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

7 posted 2000-08-09 02:38 PM

Darkly intriguing. "Fatal"...or "Companion"?....hmmmmm....love...or hate? I enjoy poems that make me think...and this one does that so well. Exceptional. Hardrock

Click
Member

since 2000-06-11

Posts 202
USA

8 posted 2000-08-09 10:02 PM

Powerful!!  Very good write!!

            Thanx!!
So well done.   I wish it had been me that wrote this one!!

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