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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. 
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Sunrise in the city Witnessed from an alleyway The Summeer breeze still blowing From the night that slipped away Black bricks slowly greying Taking on a reddish hue The city slowly waking As the Sun makes his debut Walking through the city Morning breeze against my back The Summer slowly waning Winter planning her attack Sunrise in the city Witnessed from an alleyway The gentle breeze is blowing As the sunrise slips away Sing while you may -The Prophet Q'spel Your pain is for you alone As it is As it was As it will be forever Amen -The Prophet Q'spel |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
seems often that when we speak of sunrises its from a country place with open fields..or maybe a beach.......but this sunrise in the city..sounds just as beautiful and fleeting...i like your take on this! |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Such an interesting poem. I can picture every word that you have written.  Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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ilph Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78 |
Brilliant..i am in that alleyway. Thanks also for your comments. I read your poetry, and i have something to aspire to. Thankyou. |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Ian, I could feel the busy feeling as everyone wakes, and the day begins. You captured the feelings well here, Loved it!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Ian, very strong images, great poem. Catalinamoon |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is a beautiful poem, with some original ideas. As others have said, sunrise is usually spoken more of in an open area. This is some very beautiful and original work. Your imagery is also very beautiful. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Mmhhm,...I am there. You have captured this with sheer beauty and grace. Lovely, lovely piece. Be well. *Peace. |
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sash Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125 |
Ian~Beautifully written...I am but a lil' ole' county girl, but You have lured Me into the sights, sounds and even scents of Your city.Thanks! ~Sash~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I always thought cities were hard and cold. This poem gave me a whole new image to hang on to, lovely Kethry "There are times in life a kindred spirit comes along. Hold onto those people. They are what makes this life worth living."- Anon |
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