Dark Poetry #2 |
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Vacuum |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Looking in the mirror, I see the empty eyes. With a hint of madness, that I tend to despise. If you were to look inside, of this hollow shell. You would see the things, that I know all too well. Lying at the bottom, of the empty soul. is the damage wreaked, by demons out of control. Moving on in spite, of the mortal wound. Not able to belive, it will be ending soon. Pushing past the point, of anything that is sane. Knowing only it loves you, calling out your name. One more breath,one more step. I continue on. only then I'll stop, when all hope is gone. Click |
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sash Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125 |
Well written! Emotional turmoil sometimes makes us into someone we just are'nt real happy to see. In the mirror, or anywhere else for that matter....You'll come through this with flying colors! I have all the faith in the world in ya! Take care friend... ~Sash~ |
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catalinamoon![]()
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Powerful poem, I hope you are not this sad inside. Take care. Cat... |
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MiseryDivine Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh) |
hey! pleeeaaaaseeee feel better! if u are really feeling this way...you can do it! and also great poem! i liked how it was flowing...much love~ MiSeRyDivine~~ All i want in life is to be happy It seems to me How messed up things can be Everytime i get ahead I fell more dead ~KoRn~~ |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
Very well expressed in this piece is the emptiness we all feel inside on occasion. Nicely done. Also, vacuum is one of my favorite words(it has two Us in a row!) Sing while you may -The Prophet Q'spel Your pain is for you alone As it is As it was As it will be forever Amen -The Prophet Q'spel |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Click, this is brilliant. ![]() Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
your words are a vacuum to me, they suck me in and all i want to do is read. excellent work, my friend. kynder Sunshine can not bleach The snow, Nor time unmake what Poets know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Wow, this is great! Hope your mood improves... |
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