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Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2000-07-30 04:47 AM

Dying Rose

Like the silken petals,
     of a dying rose,
        tears
stream

       d
        o
         w
          n a reddened face.

  Smears of the masque
which once served
   -as a shield-
trace
   along the contours
    of swollen cheeks.

Convulsive spasms
    of heartbroken sobs
      clench and un-clench.

It's a rapid motion;
    not unlike a-
soul-shaking seizure.

   Gripped
by this harsh reality
in an uncaring,
  spiteful world-
madness seems to beckon...
...as does death.

Yet...
   oblivion is much crueler-
       a more terrible realism
    than the agony
       of aching thoughts.

   Life,
however unprecious,
however ungiving,
   is still life.

It offers little.
Is as selfish
     as a newborn babe.

  What is gained
from the time given-
is gained only by taking;
  seizing the warmth-
  of a summer breeze-
  -or embracing the love,
        which once was there.

lotharingia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

1 posted 2000-07-30 04:55 AM

This is really really wonderful. I especially like the beginning!

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

2 posted 2000-07-30 08:12 AM

WOw Chris, a beautiful piece, really enjoyed it.

"A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun

Lynne Dale
Member

since 2000-07-18

Posts 114
Melbourne Victoria

3 posted 2000-07-30 09:05 AM

I loved this. It speaks strongly to me. Thanks.
Kethry

Kethry.
When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

4 posted 2000-07-30 09:30 AM

Christopher, very nice poem. Very good advice. Loved it.
Catalinamoon

Practice can make anything perfect...even grief can become an art.
Merrit Malloy

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

5 posted 2000-07-30 10:39 AM

I like it just as much as the unreworked version!

Deborah1
Senior Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 653
New Hampshire

6 posted 2000-07-30 10:51 AM

As selfish as a newborn babe...how true!! Loved the whole thing, excellent job here Chris!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

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