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Dance With Me In Fields Of Rain
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Dance With Me In Fields Of Rain |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Dance With Me In Fields Of Rain Dance with me in fields of rain,where sun is shy, and flowers die, and grayness overcomes, where smiles hide,and laughter goes, where no one knows,and tickles slip away, where puddles form of sadness, and anger swells,and gloom surr- ounds the days,so dance with me in fields of rain,where tears erase the years,and shouting reaches sky, where pain is free to roam, and all that's there are blackened tears and angry people cry. |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
I am astounded!!! The form, the words, the beauty....absolutally wonderful to read and feel!! "There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul..." a-alibaster "I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less, I am tears of pain, tears of Death. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Yes, fire, this is wonderful. I love the raindrop shape of the poem. I am wading through fields, forests and days of rain! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Thank you both kindly,...I feel bad that I posted and am running, but I've got to go out. I'll be back later to read, read, read, all that I have missed,...been a bit busy lately. Be well. *Peace. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
SpitFire...I'm so envious of you...your talent for writing, your knowledge of html to allow you to shape your words...your ingenuity. The poem is superb, YOU are even better. Hardrock |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Another "best" from you Spitfire! Beautifully done! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Superb, awesome, love it. You are so cool... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
a wonderful piece, really enjoyed this.  peace "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SF, Great formatting my friend!! You are writing so well these days. A pleasure to read!! You know I am always right there beside you in the rain!! Wonderful writing. Take care you. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
wonderful formatt...dancing in the rain is a personal favorite pasttime...great job! EVEN ANGELS FALL. |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Why do you write such an awesome poetry in such few words? Hot!!! Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Lynne Dale Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114Melbourne Victoria |
Awesome poem. You should think about submitting it for the book. Kethry. Kethry. When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Wow, SpitFire, this is so well written. I thoroughly enjoyed this one. |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
Not only was this a very well written poem, but it was also formated nicely, i agree you should submitt it for the book |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
loved it...we should have a challenge on pattern poetry ~~softly Maureen |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"and angry people cry..." perfect ending that...and I love your title...You rock! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wonderful work and formatting here hon, so glad I didn't miss this one.... Again you are accomplishing big time now hon I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful to read and look at! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SpitFireGirl~ You're talking my stuff ! I LOVE the format. Pop up to Open #8 and check out my 'Feather Me' .... are we on the same wavelength or what ? So good to see the growth in your writing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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sash Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125 |
Beautiful to read...Beautiful to see...Awesome job!! ~Sash~ |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
SpitFire... oh such a tremendous poem!!! Loved it! |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Great job! I enjoyed the feel and the mood of this poem. The shape of the poem was also very pleasing to the eye. -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Wonderful work indeed!!! SpitFire , My regards, sudhir |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
WOW!!!!!!!! need i say more??? ~verve |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this, this is a great wonderful poem i enjoyed and still enjoy reading it the way you shaped your words and such. i do hope to see more from you real soon. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Dedreia Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 172Kokomo, Indiana, United States |
Absolutely Awesome...enough said. Dee |
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