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Long Walk |
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JohnDLeclare Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 43 |
Long Walk Perhaps Today, I’ll walk The gray wood Boots, Thick socks, Coat, And hood. Pants that blend With dirty snow Heavy shirt Will I go? Gloves? I may, But pockets work. I’ll not care. Into gray Clouds, tree trunks, Sunless sky, Branches bare. Slowly walking. Towards? away? Till fading light End of day. Spring may come, For someone else. I could stop Feel the cold. My woods, They’re dark. Frozen, still. Quiet, old. Perhaps, Tonight, I’ll walk on. Past twilight. John D LeClare |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is so inviting! It would be great to take a long, slow walk in the woods and though the mood here is somber, it somehow fits my mood today. I liked this!  |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Perhaps, Tonight, I’ll walk on. Past twilight. this says it all for me.. ~~soft thanks Maureen |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh wow,...I really like this style of your writing. Enjoyable. Such a somber tale though,...such a well written one too. Left me feeling sort of quiet and low. Be well JDL. *Peace. *Welcome here!!! |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Hmmm, I must say, something about this I liked very much, would have voted for this one!! Vivid images for me, Great Job!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
You got it going on. Just awesome usuage of such simple words which sends shivers down my spine yet a warm touch of glow I feel. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very nice,John. I love the way you used such small groups of words, that express the image perfectly. Catalinamoon |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
John...Brevity is not only the soul of wit, it is the soul of this beautiful poem. Hardrock |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
I liked this style of writing. Great poem. |
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Chere Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 18 |
This poem is simply wonderful. And what I felt the third time through was that your thoughts merge the two . . .darkness & light that is* Chere* |
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JohnDLeclare Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 43 |
Thanks for all the great comments. Is it just my ISP or is it very hard to get to this site ? I have been unable to log in all week end  John D |
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