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DJLI
Member

since 2000-06-21

Posts 237
TN, USA

0 posted 2000-07-24 11:37 PM

There's one star in the sky,
that tends to remind me of you,
it shines brightest of them all,
kinda like you used to do.

Its light streches out,
as did your arms to hold me tight.
You were my shining star.
You were my eternal light.

I never had to look to the sky,
'cause I knew you were always there.
And I never had to make a wish,
'cause I knew you'd always care.

But suddenly I found myself
all alone in the night,
wondering what hapened to my star,
and its brilliant light.

Did it burn out?
Is that possible at all?
I never thought it would happen,
that my loving star would fall.

EVEN ANGELS FALL.

thebeautybrat
Member

since 2000-03-30

Posts 114
Florida

1 posted 2000-07-24 11:55 PM

beautiful poem!! i loved the words "you were my eternal light" i've had these exact feelings before! i love the way you put your feelings into words. much better than i ever could! well written!

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

2 posted 2000-07-25 06:01 AM

Superb! Like your analogy.

LarBear
Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 138
Kingston, New York

3 posted 2000-07-25 06:15 AM

Excellent.. I love the use of stars..

Your poem is a sister to my new one I posted Friday night. Please read it " Your Star".
These two poems together is awsome.

LarBear

Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member

since 2000-03-21

Posts 680
Kansas

4 posted 2000-07-25 03:21 PM

GREAT LOVE POEM!!!

You have put into words the things I wonder myself. You did a hell of a job here, perfect!!

DkW

Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light

Deborah1
Senior Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 653
New Hampshire

5 posted 2000-07-25 03:52 PM

That my loving star would fall..A beautiful line but sad... I love the star analogy, this was really good!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

Ginners
Member

since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

6 posted 2000-07-25 05:29 PM

I really like your poem. I like the way you used a star it was very good

StarrGazer
Senior Member

since 2000-03-05

Posts 679
Texas

7 posted 2000-07-25 07:46 PM

This was fantabulous ! Great Job !!

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