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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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on the rocks Wind in the pines whistles as the snow blows cold and thick. Could cheerfully sell our souls for some tender and dry sticks. Been out hunting the old trap line caught in this storm a brewing. Temperature falling mighty fast looks bad, and we ain't fooling. Hunkered down under these pines scraggly enough to offer little protection. It's a getting darker, and we're concerned not a wanting any further speculation. Tried to shoot a plane awhile back figured that way he'd know we was here. Speck we didn't even come close cause the sky since has been clear. Froze to death a poachin deer who would have ever thought. Sure didn't see this end a coming mighty poor way a being caught. It's funny the way a man figures he ain't never going to run out of time. And then when it comes right down to it ends up on his knees in midst of a bind. bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very good, Daniel! I like this alot! Denise |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Indeed! A sad and remorseful hunter's tale.. I like it very much. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
well written.. the title caught my eye... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
A most enjoyable read, sir. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Bleeding, This is an unusual subject, and that's why I liked it so much! Immortality becomes real in a storm (any kind of storm). And I thought the title was apt for the subject matter... very good in fact. Linda M. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I enjoyed this very much! |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
very different, not what i'm used to. liked the way it flows. good job. P. J. Kotrch carpe diem A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Bleed.. Wow, a bush hunter's life.. how interesting.. you have described everything in such details.. something really different and enjoyable too.. vote=true - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
thank y'all for the response... sorry haven't posted more timely, my beloved has been in hospital since Monday. Kinda loosing track of time and space for abit... bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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