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Tramp Poet
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Could Be Anywhere...

0 posted 2000-07-17 07:12 PM


on the rocks

Wind in the pines whistles
as the snow blows cold and thick.
Could cheerfully sell our souls
for some tender and dry sticks.

Been out hunting the old trap line
caught in this storm a brewing.
Temperature falling mighty fast
looks bad, and we ain't fooling.

Hunkered down under these pines
scraggly enough to offer little protection.
It's a getting darker, and we're concerned
not a wanting any further speculation.

Tried to shoot a plane awhile back
figured that way he'd know we was here.
Speck we didn't even come close
cause the sky since has been clear.

Froze to death a poachin deer
who would have ever thought.
Sure didn't see this end a coming
mighty poor way a being caught.

It's  funny the way a man figures
he ain't never going to run out of time.
And then when it comes right down to it
ends up on his knees in midst of a bind.



bleeding...

"Tis ink coming
from his arm,
Captain!"


© Copyright 2000 Daniel James Burt - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2000-07-17 08:13 PM


Very good, Daniel! I like this alot!

Denise

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-07-17 10:18 PM


Indeed! A sad and remorseful hunter's tale.. I like it very much.
AVANTI
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INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
3 posted 2000-07-17 11:59 PM


well written..
the title caught my eye...


If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
4 posted 2000-07-18 07:07 AM


A most enjoyable read, sir.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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linda munday
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since 2000-06-17
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Adelaide, Australia
5 posted 2000-07-18 07:18 AM


Bleeding,
This is an unusual subject, and that's why I liked it so much!
Immortality becomes real in a storm (any kind of storm).
And I thought the title was apt for the subject matter... very good in fact.
Linda M.

Martie
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6 posted 2000-07-18 04:44 PM


I enjoyed this very much!
epoet
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since 2000-05-11
Posts 291
grand rapid,MI, usa
7 posted 2000-07-18 09:45 PM


very different, not what i'm used to.  liked the way it flows.  good job.

P. J. Kotrch
carpe diem
A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love


jamesjiao
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since 2000-04-12
Posts 268
Backwaters of Avalon
8 posted 2000-07-19 05:10 AM


Bleed.. Wow, a bush hunter's life.. how interesting.. you have described everything in such details.. something really different and enjoyable too.. vote=true

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.



Tramp Poet
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 754
Could Be Anywhere...
9 posted 2000-07-22 03:13 AM


thank y'all for the response...
sorry haven't posted more timely,
my beloved has been in hospital since
Monday. Kinda loosing track of time
and space for abit...


bleeding...

"Tis ink coming
from his arm,
Captain!"


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