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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2000-07-14 12:07 PM



My life’s tapestry, woven carefully
lies before me torn and tattered
lost to me forever
all the things that ever mattered.

One strand pulled another,
unraveling in my embrace.
Screaming out in painful loss,
I cradle it to my face.

Unbound, my life is nothing;
no past, no future course.
I hold the shreds of yesterday
crying out with remorse.

Give back my life! I cry,
to ears that will not hear.
I cannot live without those threads,
to show that I was here!


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Sven
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1 posted 2000-07-14 12:41 PM


Those threads make a wonderful picture. . .

Superb my friend...

---------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Dark Angel
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2 posted 2000-07-14 01:42 AM


Give back my life! I cry,
to ears that will not hear.
I cannot live without those threads,
to show that I was here!


Lovely Sharon  

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2000-07-14 07:33 AM


PoetdeVine~
Wonderful 'tapestry' of thought.

'I cannot live without those threads,
to show that I was here!'

And we all are the threads woven ...
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Severn
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4 posted 2000-07-14 07:35 AM


Oh this is just gorgeous Sharon...that line:
'Give back my life! I cry,'

really really gets me...

well done!

K

BSC
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5 posted 2000-07-14 07:56 AM


Beautiful PdV, those last two lines are great, a very moving piece.  Bonnie
Alicat
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6 posted 2000-07-14 08:07 AM


Sharon, this one really got me.  I have heard said, "No life is truly over until all the ripples they created are still."

PdV, ya done got my vote.


Alicat

Sunshine
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7 posted 2000-07-14 02:07 PM


{~,^}

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


Sudhir Iyer
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8 posted 2000-07-14 02:53 PM


Ditto everybody else's thoughts and say that the last stanza was most beautiful (if I were to pick one...)

Give back my life! I cry,
to ears that will not hear.
I cannot live without those threads,
to show that I was here!

...

WOW

regards, sudhir

Poertree
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9 posted 2000-07-14 04:17 PM


Hi sharon

pretty good job - pretty sad as well ..

philip

Janet Marie
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10 posted 2000-07-14 04:58 PM


powerful poetry poetD...
perfectly said...
love the word tapestry...its so poetic
great great writing
jm

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~

Not A Poet
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11 posted 2000-07-14 05:11 PM


Very very nice, Sharon.

Pete

WhtDove
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12 posted 2000-07-14 05:43 PM


Ya just got a way of grabbin someone's heart ya know!

May your threads continue to be woven for an eternity  

dgvarner
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13 posted 2000-07-14 06:06 PM


poet..this is awesome..i love the last bit as well!  but the whole thing is great!!  

dg


"i speak in written word--my lips, no sound may utter..." dgvarner

Kit McCallum
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14 posted 2000-07-14 07:36 PM


Filled with such emotion and vivid imagery Sharon ... beautifully written! (click)  

Best wishes,
/Kit

wayoutwalt
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15 posted 2000-07-14 07:41 PM


i love the lesson here and the way you um yuh weaved it sorry
AVANTI
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16 posted 2000-07-14 11:27 PM


very deep and true words...
I always say that our relationships are like strings that hold us together...
with each string that breaks,it hurts and want it back the way it was...
this poem somewhat reminded me of that and my life's tapestry...
lovely...and a little sad how we lose those strings,but you never know when that detached string may attach itself...
thankyou...for reminding me
Avanti


If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


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17 posted 2000-07-14 11:29 PM


Sharon, this is beautiful! You have my vote!  

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Mike
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18 posted 2000-07-15 08:11 AM


exquisite poetry.  (but what else would you expect?  *smile*)
Bustem57
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19 posted 2000-07-15 09:44 AM


All I can say is ..just wonderful!!!
X Angel
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20 posted 2000-07-15 04:40 PM


Sharon...beautiful job. So true too, we are just threads of a Tapestry...

*smiling*
I liked this lots girl!
~H

Geoffrey Sonnen
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21 posted 2000-07-15 05:31 PM


Oh God, this is incredible Sharon. Such passionate longing, angst and anguish written in such a potent way. Believe me, I am there with you.
                   Peace to you,  Geoffrey  

Geoffrey Sonnen
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22 posted 2000-07-15 05:40 PM


Had to respond again. Had to read again. I hope you don't mind Sharon that I print this and share it with some friends. It is just too powerful to not share.
                   Thanks again, Geoffrey
  *my vote*

Jamie
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23 posted 2000-07-16 01:17 AM


Beautiful. Speaks volumes

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


tracie66
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24 posted 2000-07-17 03:02 AM


A wonderful tapestry woven from the heart  
Lovely
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Romy
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25 posted 2000-07-17 09:24 AM


Sharon, I was very moved by your poem. It reminds me of a relative of mine who has been feeling as if her life has become"torn and tattered".

It is a good description of the way many people feel from time to time as they struggle to hang on to the "threads of yesterday".

Thank-you (VOTE)
Debbie

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