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0 posted 2000-06-18 01:31 PM

                    The mood is upon me.
                    Fighting its grasp,
                    is mere futility;
                    feeding its thirst,
                    by my very throes.
                    Jealousy, gloom, bitterness
                    swirling in my head,
                    dizzying me deliciously.
                    An occasional focus,
                    to allow a cobra strike,
                    and relishing the sting,
                    I've visited upon you.
                    Your words are meaningless,
                    your assertions useless.
                    No one can stand,
                    against me now.
                    Because the mood is upon me.
                    Hateful, spiteful assaults,
                    my locquacious daggers
                    dropping you, lifeless,
                    and I gloat sadly
                    over my fallen prey.
                    Subjugation of spite,
                    to allow brief light,
                    golden, shimmering light,
                    to touch my mind.
                    Only to wrap itself
                    inside, safely away.
                    For the mood is upon me.
                    Stolen thoughts of joy,
                    replaced by dreams.
                    Bloody in their vehemence,
                    the slaughter of innocence,
                    the destruction of youth,
                    the feel of my hand,
                    gripping your slowing heart,
                    in its icy metal clutch.
                    Smiling, eye to eye,
                    I squeeze the essence,
                    from your paling soul,
                    for no reason other than,
                    the mood is upon me.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

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1 posted 2000-06-18 03:05 PM

JP~ this is really spooky and dark..... I think some of our Dark Passion should be in the book!   -SEA
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2 posted 2000-06-19 06:48 PM

dark definitely needs a chapter, or a book on it's own, powerful stuff here JP

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3 posted 2000-06-19 06:52 PM

the mood is upon writing....I know this
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4 posted 2000-06-20 12:45 PM

Bravo JP, very powerful work. I loved the idea of "loquacious daggers". There shouldn't be a "c" before the "q" though  


"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

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5 posted 2000-06-20 05:31 PM

this is excellent in its honesty JP--liked it much--and I did vote...
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6 posted 2000-07-01 06:01 PM

I really enjoyed this, JP. Time to thrust it back into the light.


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7 posted 2000-07-03 04:31 AM

YES! Now this is what I like to see. Straight and no BS!


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