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Justbleu
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0 posted 2000-06-18 11:01 AM



Such bright in the dimmness
Amongst the brown and green
Running blue flows wild nearby
Friendly shadows in a trance
All is warm and free
In such delicate harmony
Perfection in a dream
Soft carresses
An easy touch
Sparks a flame of desire
One swaying in the wind
Closeness as one with all
Life in full circle, delicate
Songs of flesh echoeing
In the moment of time
All worlds combine together
Catching all in hypnotic dance
Joy love and peace unite
A picture of truth
All in a mystery


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"Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown





[This message has been edited by Justbleu (edited 06-19-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Bridgette C. Morgan Schroeder - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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1 posted 2000-06-18 11:08 AM


I love this images that come to mind with this! Beautiful!   -SEA
Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2000-06-18 11:16 AM


"In the moment of time
All worlds combine together
Catching all in hypnotic dance"

Lovely JustBleu ... I particularly liked the lines above, very nicely penned!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Poet deVine
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3 posted 2000-06-18 12:13 PM


Vivid imagery! I liked it...though the green font made it hard to read for me.    
Justbleu
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4 posted 2000-06-18 01:03 PM


I agree the green was hard to read!!  Here ya go this should be easier!!!!  

Bridgette

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2000-06-19 11:49 AM


lovely and sensual imagery and emotions
perfect choice
jm

X Angel
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6 posted 2000-06-19 01:45 PM


I liked the poem, thought the gaps between lines made it a bit awkward, and you had some typos......(I am only telling ya cuz it's a book submission   )
but other than the minor stuff this was great
~Heather

Justbleu
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7 posted 2000-06-20 02:54 PM


Thank ya everyone!!  
Colin
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8 posted 2000-06-20 06:12 PM


Very soothing  

Eric.

"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

JP
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9 posted 2000-06-22 12:36 PM


Very nice.  I like what I see from you  

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

Justbleu
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10 posted 2000-06-24 10:03 PM


Eric Thank You bunches!!!  I love your quote....Willy Wonka is sooo cool!!  Oompa, OOmpa.....anywayz!!  

JP Thank you too!!!  I'm having way too much fun tonight!!  My Mom has always said, I'm silly!!



"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Meadowmuse
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11 posted 2000-06-24 10:11 PM


This is a lovely verse...it reads just as well backward as forward...beautiful thoughts!

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


AVANTI
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12 posted 2000-06-25 01:05 AM


beautiful verse...
well written

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


Christopher J
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13 posted 2000-06-25 01:50 AM


A sweet poem...i know this is going in the book..
Justbleu
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14 posted 2000-06-25 11:40 AM


Thank You Claire....that's cool, I read it backwards after you responded and yeah it does sound good that way too!!!  

Avanti Thanks for your kind thoughts!!  

Christopher you seem to be postive...Thanks!!
We will see!!  

Bridgette

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"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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15 posted 2000-06-25 12:01 PM


Beautiful, Bridgette! Absolutely beautiful! I'm glad Claire mentioned the reading it backwards thing! So cool! I'll have to start reading others backwards now too!

Denise


p.s. Did I ever mention how much I love your name? I think I did. It was also my great grandmother's name. It's one of my all time favorite names!

brian madden
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16 posted 2000-06-25 01:07 PM


wow a beautiful poem, lovely dream like images.

"An abyss that lasted creation A circus complete with all fools
Foundations that lasted the ages Then ripped apart at their roots"
joy division

Justbleu
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17 posted 2000-06-26 01:56 PM


Thank You Denise...yeah it is cool read backwards!!  That is cool that your Grandmother had the same name as I do!!  Thank You for sharing that with me!!!  

Brian, Thanks for your thoughts about lovely dreamlike images!!! Cool!!  
About your quote...I know Joy Division's music a little bit...the lyrics are very deep, dark pieces of poetry!!  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

X Angel
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18 posted 2000-06-28 02:06 PM


shhhhh
I am bumping this back to the top  
I liked this too well to let it get lost
*hugs*
~Heather

kelieth
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19 posted 2000-07-01 12:28 PM


Great piece with vivid imagery.  Great Job.  

Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."

Justbleu
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20 posted 2000-07-04 08:35 AM


LOL, K, X Angel I'll be very quiet!! Thank You!!

Kelieth, Thank You so much!!!


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Justbleu
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21 posted 2000-07-23 09:49 PM


This is about a true and very memorable night in my life!!! Thanks again you all!!
Bridgette


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

juliet_2u
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22 posted 2000-07-24 11:30 AM


Bridgette, absolutely beautiful. If I wasn't typing I'd stand up and applaud, lol. I'm new here and I tell ya, I'm in awe of some of the stuff I've read and this was one of them. Thanks for sharing, Juls
Parker
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23 posted 2000-07-24 11:53 AM


Justblue, loved the images. My vote is in, and the idea of reading it backwards

Parker

Geoffrey Sonnen
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24 posted 2000-07-24 12:02 PM


Just gorgeous. Making Love within the beauty of nature. Sounds good to me ! Very nicely phrased and visually sumptuous. Thanks for the journey !

Peace, Geoffrey

Heather Miller
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25 posted 2000-07-24 01:14 PM


Very nice. I have loved the ones I've read from you....All seem to be really great so far. Haven't found one yet I haven't loved.
LITL,
Heather

With God all things are possible.

Toddles
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26 posted 2000-07-24 10:51 PM


Peaceful and well written!
Justbleu
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27 posted 2000-07-25 02:04 PM


Geoffrey you've got it on the nose!!!  
Heather that is great to hear you like my writing in general!!  And Toddles thanks!!
Thank You everyone for the comments!!
Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Justbleu
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28 posted 2000-07-25 02:05 PM


Oops Juliet and Parker Thank You to you too!!!!  
Bridgette


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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