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Di
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since 2000-06-29
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Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2000-07-03 06:16 PM



She sure is pretty
She makes heads turn
I can see why you'd want her
How she'd cause your loins to burn.

She's radiant and beautiful
Causes weakness in the knees
Men sweat as she passes
Oh, she's just such a tease.

You are the envy of all
This is so true
You're a handsome couple
There's nothing I can do.

But will she wash your clothes and iron them?
Rub your back and pluck your ears?
Listen how your day went?
And kiss away your tears?

She must be something special
You chose her over me
I wonder if she'll love you
But I have to set you free.

I wasn't enough to keep you
You needed more than me
I hope that she was worth it
Are you happy as can be?

A better pair I've yet to see
Nothing could be finer
But the cowboy of my dreams
Traded me in for a Freightliner!!
~Di~



~People shine from the inside out~

© Copyright 2000 Di - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 2000-07-03 08:24 PM


Di, you pluck ears? I'm yours!!!
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-07-03 08:40 PM


LOL..ok...I'm getting a visual!!! Cute!  
Di
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 19
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2000-07-03 08:49 PM


Yup, have to pluck those unsightly hairs lol.
Give me the tweezers and let me at 'em!!

It IS really a nice truck though lol...
It would have been much more insulting had it been an ugly truck no????
Have to have a sense of humour about these things  

Thanks for the comments, they make me smile

~People shine from the inside out~

Balladeer
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4 posted 2000-07-03 08:50 PM


Well, it coulda been a Peterbuilt!
Denise
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5 posted 2000-07-05 08:49 PM


This is delightful, Di! Well written!  

Denise

Di
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since 2000-06-29
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Ontario, Canada
6 posted 2000-07-05 09:11 PM


Thank you Denise  
I appreciate you reading me.

~People shine from the inside out~

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London
7 posted 2000-07-05 09:41 PM


Di ... you actually made me laugh out loud ... if that was not your intent then I am sorry ... but thanks for posting this
well done ... 'vote'

Rex

Di
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 19
Ontario, Canada
8 posted 2000-07-05 10:00 PM


Yes Rex   that was my intention, and I'm glad it worked!

~People shine from the inside out~

Poet deVine
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9 posted 2000-08-07 10:34 PM


Bump!! for another turn...
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
10 posted 2000-08-08 06:00 AM


Hey Poet deVine, Thanks for bumping this one...
I had missed reading this fabulous poem....

Di,
great work... hope to see more poems from you...  


regards,
sudir

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
11 posted 2000-08-08 06:35 AM


You told it like it is but with such style.. great poem....reminds me of a couple of lines from a song by ..The Little River Band..

"The other guy won't be around
to talk to the kids
He won't pick you up when you're down
the way that I did."

I wrote a poem about this kind of thing it's posted in open 9  It's called Skin Deep
so I know how you feel.

voting

Di
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 19
Ontario, Canada
12 posted 2000-08-08 06:16 PM


Thanks for the bump Poet deVine  

Thanks for taking the time to read me Sudhir. I'm pleased that you liked it.

Dear ethome, I had fun writing it. I'll be sure to "check you out" as well. Thanks for your kind words.

P.S.
I think he may be sorry he traded me *S*

~People shine from the inside out~

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
13 posted 2000-08-08 10:23 PM


Well Di, do not despair, it seems he made a bad deal......( do you really pluck ears?)
how about clipping nails????...lol



Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



Di
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 19
Ontario, Canada
14 posted 2000-08-09 07:19 PM


Hey Jamie,Yup...even plucked his ears lol. Took the tweezers to them. He did how own nails though...You have to draw the line somewhere ya know!!!  

~People shine from the inside out~

jamesjiao
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Backwaters of Avalon
15 posted 2000-08-09 07:50 PM


Hi, Di, isn't it supposed be a sad poem, how come I laughed from start to end? ^_^ and I didn't know you pluck ears and do massage?.. hehe..
jamesjiao
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Backwaters of Avalon
16 posted 2000-08-09 07:50 PM


Hi, Di, isn't it supposed be a sad poem, how come I laughed from start to end? ^_^ and I didn't know you pluck ears and do massage?.. hehe..

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.



Di
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 19
Ontario, Canada
17 posted 2000-08-09 10:05 PM


Hi James
Yes, in fact this SHOULD be a sad story..and in real life, it was. I think there's too much "sad" in real life. It's a natural response but sometimes it's ok to look at the lighter side. For me, laughter is the best times.

~People shine from the inside out~

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