navwin » Archives » Voices on the Web » A Wish Upon My Star
Voices on the Web
Post A Reply Post New Topic A Wish Upon My Star Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State

0 posted 2000-07-03 05:35 PM

I wished upon a star
The brightest one I could see
As if shouting out loud
“Please, come wish upon me!”

I’m left gazing
Staring into the night
By your wonder
Fascinated by your sight

Happy and full of life
Celebrating how free you fly
So bold and strong
Outshining the rest in the sky

Are you there
Do you really still burn?
I beg you to be
Please give me what I yearn

Smiling at me from afar
Yet somehow you seem so near
You quietly speak to me
Almost whispering in my ear

Cradle me in your light
Please give to me what I wish
Illumination reaches out
On my cheek placing a kiss

I’m left dreaming
Of my wish I sent to you
How long I shall wait?
Forever, ‘till my wish comes true

I wished upon a star
The brightest one I could see
My love, are that shinning star
And I wished for you to fall upon me

© Copyright 2000 Sheri - All Rights Reserved
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-07-03 05:46 PM

Oh, this is a real beauty, Irie! Wonderfully written!  


JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
2 posted 2000-07-03 07:35 PM

Stars are really beautiful. I liked this.


Poet deVine
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
3 posted 2000-07-03 09:21 PM

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
4 posted 2000-07-04 12:42 PM

Blazing with the intensity of the stars... this is as beautiful as their light.


Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
5 posted 2000-07-04 01:06 AM

Wonderful Irie. . .

May you get your wish and fall for the star that you wish upon. . .


That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
6 posted 2000-07-04 03:19 PM

Denise, Joy, Sharon, Chris & John!

Many, Many Thanks to ALL of you for your
warm and wonderful comments!  


Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
7 posted 2000-07-04 04:13 PM

As beautiful as the stars are distant.

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

8 posted 2000-07-04 10:00 PM

enjoyed this sparking gem much...
very lovely imagery
great writing and presentation
take care

What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
9 posted 2000-07-04 10:10 PM

So wistfully penned.
A lovely wish.

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
10 posted 2000-07-05 08:07 AM

So wonderfully dreamy...loved the imagery you produced with this, excellent read..well done  

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
11 posted 2000-07-05 10:46 AM

Must agree with the others, this is really nice.  The style makes it flow so well and it enhances the fascination of wishing upon a star. Of course, the imagery makes possible the wish to become reality.
~~nice writing~~  would be a nice addition to any poetry bood!

A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
12 posted 2000-07-05 07:11 PM

Jamie, Janet, Marge, Tracie & Danny,
Great big thanks to you all for your warm and kind comments! They mean a lot to me!  
Thanks again! This sparkling gem is my star!  


Tepok Bopar
Junior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 27

13 posted 2000-07-06 08:24 AM

This is a wonderful piece Irie. The path to fullfilment is sometimes a long one. I hope your dreams come true.
Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London
14 posted 2000-07-06 10:29 AM

Such wonderful emotions flowing here
very nicely done


Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
15 posted 2000-07-07 01:58 AM

Thanks Tepok and Welcome to Passions! I do hope you enjoy it here!
And a great big thanks to you too Rex.
Warm thank you's to you both!  


Jeffrey Carter
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367
State of constant confusion!
16 posted 2000-07-07 04:52 AM

No reply neccesary here *V
since 2000-04-27
Posts 107
17 posted 2000-07-08 12:52 PM

I like this.
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
18 posted 2000-07-08 12:56 PM

I loved this one when you first wrote it.  It moves in me the same way today.  Wonderful poem - no one should have to wait "forever", I'm sure you won't, either.


Kit McCallum
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
19 posted 2000-07-08 02:47 PM

Wonderful Irie!  The style and flow in this lovely poem compliment the dreamy, mystical sentiments you've penned. Just lovely!

Best wishes,

Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
20 posted 2000-07-08 07:47 PM

Jeffrey, T, Michael & Kit,

Thank you all for you comments! You're all so much appreciated by me!

And hey Michael, this is the first time I've posted this one, just wrote it!
Wondering if you're speaking of another poem?

Again, Big thanks to you ALL!!!!!!  


bad little dog
Junior Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 38
city pound
21 posted 2000-07-09 01:33 AM

beautiful poem ... but you're best to look before you lie down in the grass
voted on a star
< !signature-->

Ruff Bow Wow

[This message has been edited by bad little dog (edited 07-09-2000).]

Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
22 posted 2000-07-09 11:44 PM

this is the first time i am reading you
but i'm gald i did...
this is such wonderful imaginery...
lovely work

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
23 posted 2000-07-10 01:25 AM

This my dear, is a work of art!!! Definantly one of your softer ones.. I love it girl!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
24 posted 2000-07-12 11:34 AM

Bad Little Dog, I think I know what you're saying......and if that's that case, then I always do.  

AVANTI, Thank you for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed!  

Devina, A work of art huh? Well, We'll just see about that!  

Thanks to you all for responding to my post!
Warm hugs to you all!


Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
25 posted 2000-07-12 12:27 PM

This is beautiful poetry, lovely flow, great writing...

enjoyed this very much...

regards, sudhir

Junior Member
since 2000-05-04
Posts 10

26 posted 2000-07-13 12:41 PM

Irie, this poem is truly beautiful. excellent expression my best firend. love you

Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
27 posted 2000-07-17 01:25 AM

Sudhir, Thankyou so much, I'm so glad you enjoyed!  

Aleisha, Thanks so much hun! Nice to see you here again. I'm glad you liked this one! Hope to see you soon! Love to you and the family!  


Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
28 posted 2000-07-17 07:44 AM

Lovely sentiments...Me LIKES!!!  

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

X Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
29 posted 2000-07-19 04:05 PM

somehow I thought I had read this before...or maybe I did and just didn't reply???
This was wonderful!


Heather Miller
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409
Bryan, Ohio USA
30 posted 2000-07-20 06:39 PM


With God all things are possible.

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Voices on the Web » A Wish Upon My Star

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary